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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric car should replace them. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric car should replace them. v. 1
It is argued that fossil burning cars should be entirely forbid and replaced with an electric car. This essay agrees with this statement because it is an environmental friendly option that also promote the usage of renewable source of energy. Petroleum and gas fuelled vehicles causes the toxic emission, that drastically hampers the environment. Worldwide, Cars are the prime mode of transport when it comes to the personal mode of transportation, thus account for the largest account of toxic gas emission. This type of air born emission responsible for the greenhouse effect which ultimately causing devastating effects on health, because of the dangerous UV-Rays. Thus, considering the long term permanent solution, It is advisable to shift towards a better way of transport, which do not cause air pollution, such as electric cars! Why? For instance, considering alarming air pollution caused by the vehicles in the national capital of India - Delhi, local government introduce odd-even scheme to reduce the vehicles on the roads that actually benefited the capital to the certain extent but the problem still persist. What is more, an electric engine based cars were as powerful as fuel based cars. Electricity utilised to run likewise cars generated from the renewable sources of electricity like solar and wind energy. Unlike fossil based cars, demolish the non-renewable source of energy, whereas electric car promote the usage of renewable source. For example, the Telsa electric car is highly successful within the USA runs through the solar power station, to charge such cars. Simply means that the better and sustainable alternative is available, and therefor it should be adopted word widely as soon as possible, to restrain from the further damage to the environment. In conclusion, I firmly believe that entirely replacing fossil based cars with electric cars decrease carbon footprint and its associated dangerous outcomes and provide the best alternative to utilise the renewable electricity.
It
is argued
that fossil burning
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cars
should be
entirely
forbid and replaced with an
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electric
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car
. This essay
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agrees
with this statement
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because
it is an environmental friendly option that
also
promote the usage of
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renewable
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source
of energy.

Petroleum and gas fuelled vehicles causes the toxic emission, that
drastically
hampers the environment. Worldwide,
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Cars
are the prime mode of transport when it
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comes
to the personal mode of transportation,
thus
account for the largest account of toxic gas emission. This type of air born emission responsible for the greenhouse effect which
ultimately
causing devastating effects on health,
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because
of the
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dangerous
UV-Rays.
Thus
, considering the long term permanent solution, It is advisable to shift towards a better way of transport, which do not cause air pollution, such as
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electric
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cars
! Why?
For instance
, considering alarming air pollution caused by the vehicles in the national capital of India
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-
Delhi, local
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government
introduce odd-even scheme to
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reduce
the vehicles on the roads that actually benefited the capital to the certain extent
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but
the problem
still
persist.

What is more
, an
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electric
engine based
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cars
were as powerful as fuel based
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cars
. Electricity
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utilised
to run
likewise
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cars
generated from the
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renewable
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sources
of electricity like solar and wind energy. Unlike fossil based
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cars
, demolish the non-renewable
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source
of energy, whereas
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electric
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car
promote the usage of
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renewable
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source
.
For example
, the
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Telsa
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electric
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car
is
highly
successful within the USA runs through the solar power station, to charge such
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cars
.
Simply
means that the better and sustainable alternative is available, and therefor it should
be adopted
word
widely
as
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soon
as possible, to restrain from the
further
damage to the environment.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
entirely
replacing fossil based
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cars
with
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electric
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cars
decrease carbon footprint and its associated
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dangerous
outcomes and provide the best alternative to
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utilise
the
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renewable
electricity.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric car should replace them. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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