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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.10

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. v. 10
entertainment plays a crucial role in life with mass form, as we know it today is film. while there are some individuals who believe that films only bring entertainment for them, I would argue that educational factors should have been involved films. On one hand, it is true that movies should merely be intended for entertainment purpose. Firstly, most film-goers are inclined for seek satisfaction out of such elements as captivating screenplay, lively sound, magnificent visual effects. This might leads to many films like action or sci-fi movies which might appeal to viewers. For example, superhero movies like The Avengers can always be seen among the high-grossing ones. Secondly, films have the purpose of entertainment which helps people reduce the pressures and have a better work-life balance in modern society. On the other hand, I believe that movies should feature educational factors. The first clear reason is that educational elements are more beneficial for their audience knowledge in some ways. For instance, science movies could broaden audience’s mind with learning from that area such as the world out of planet like Mars, animal world wild and so on. Additionally, viewers often increase the likelihood of remembering through educational content in films, leading to higher chances of their actual adaptation in real life. To illustrate, when my little sister watch how an actor communicates with the older people in an educational movie, she greets politely when meeting the elderly. In conclusion, while there are those who think that films are only educational purpose, I believe that educational lessons should have been appeared in movies.
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entertainment
plays a crucial role in life with mass form, as we know it
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today
is film.
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while
there are
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some
individuals who believe that films
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only
bring entertainment for them, I would argue that
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educational
factors should have
been involved
films.

On one hand, it is true that
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movies
should
merely
be intended
for entertainment purpose.
Firstly
, most film-goers
are inclined
for seek satisfaction out of such elements as captivating screenplay, lively sound, magnificent visual effects. This might leads to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
films like action or sci-fi
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movies
which might appeal to viewers.
For example
, superhero
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movies
like The Avengers can always be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
among the high-grossing ones.
Secondly
, films have the purpose of entertainment which
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helps
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people
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reduce
the pressures and have a better work-life balance in modern society.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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movies
should feature
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educational
factors. The
first
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clear
reason is that
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educational
elements are more beneficial for their audience knowledge in
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some
ways.
For instance
, science
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movies
could broaden audience’s mind with learning from that area such as the world out of planet like Mars, animal world wild and
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so
on.
Additionally
, viewers
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often
increase the likelihood of remembering through
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educational
content in films, leading to higher chances of their actual adaptation in real life. To illustrate, when my
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little
sister
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
how an actor communicates with the older
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people
in an
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educational
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movie
, she greets
politely
when meeting the elderly.

In conclusion
, while there are those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that films are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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educational
purpose, I believe that
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educational
lessons should have
been appeared
in
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movies
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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