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Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.3

Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. v. 3
Driving has always remained a fascinating thing for the people of every age group because it makes them to do myriad things in order to bring excitement as well as to fulfill their requirements. However, some hold the opinion that people of age group 18 should be allowed to drive a car, while others are not in favor of it. Thus, I am going to put forth my views over the requirement of this statement. To begin with, former view can be supported on account of multifarious reasons. Firstly, adolescence is considered as a perfect age to comprehend about various things, because people grasp skills very swiftly during this time. Furthermore, it will be easier for youngsters to commute from one place to another, and thus they will be able to reach at their destination on time. On the top of that, driving can assist youngsters to reduce burden of their parents, because youngsters will be able to manage their work by own by going at any place easily, thereby there will be no disturbance to their parents in order to fulfill petty requirements of their children. On the contrary, driving can result humongous predicaments for people, thus certain age such as not less than twenty five can be a viable owing to many fruitful reasons. Firstly, maturity and sense of responsibility come at a specific age and driving needs both the things because mature people are able to take better decisions in emergency situations such as flat tire while driving. In addition, drivers of this age will be more patient and will not indulge themselves in any road race with other cars while youngsters often get involve in car racing due to their aggression and immaturity which can result in accidents. For instance, it has been found that many young people end their life due to breakneck speed of vehicles, which indicate immaturity of young people. In conclusion, It is an unequivocal that one should learn about any skill at the right time, which is more pertinent.
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people
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age
group
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because
it
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makes
them to do myriad things in order to bring excitement
as well
as to fulfill their requirements.
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,
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some
hold the opinion that
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people
of
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age
group 18 should be
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allowed
to drive a car, while others are not in favor of it.
Thus
, I am going to put forth my views over the requirement of this statement.

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begin
with, former view can
be supported
on account of multifarious reasons.
Firstly
, adolescence
is considered
as a perfect
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age
to comprehend about various things,
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because
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people
grasp
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skills
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very
swiftly
during this time.
Furthermore
, it will be easier for youngsters to commute from one place to another, and
thus
they will be able to reach at their destination on time. On the top of that,
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driving
can assist youngsters to
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reduce
burden of their parents,
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because
youngsters will be able to manage their work by
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own
by going at any place
easily
, thereby there will be no disturbance to their parents in order to fulfill petty requirements of their children.

On the contrary
,
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driving
can result humongous predicaments for
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people
,
thus
certain
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age
such as not less than
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twenty five
can be a viable owing to
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many
fruitful reasons.
Firstly
, maturity and sense of responsibility
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come
at a specific
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age
and
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driving
needs both the things
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because
mature
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people
are able to take better decisions in emergency situations such as flat tire while
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driving
.
In addition
, drivers of this
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age
will be more patient and will not indulge themselves in any road race with other cars while youngsters
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often
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get
involve in car racing due to their aggression and immaturity which can result in accidents.
For instance
, it has
been found
that
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many
young
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people
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end
their
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life
due to breakneck speed of vehicles, which indicate immaturity of young
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people
.

In conclusion
, It is an unequivocal that one should learn about any
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skill
at the right time, which is more pertinent.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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