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Some people believe that the main environmental problems of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that the main environmental problems of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1
It is true that human beings are facing the most difficult challenges to overcome that are the environmental issues. While I accept that we should keep an eye on regaining and recovering the fauna and flora from extinction, I believe that there are more main problems needing to be solved out. People often discuss about the decrease in the amount of species in the wildlife, in terms of plants and animals. The past decades have seen a great loss in the animal kingdom due to our killing too many of them for food, their furs, etc. In addition, we have been devastating their habitats to make farms which breeds their being on the edge of complete extinction. In fact, regular deforestations are cutting down on large areas of forests and therefore, it would wipe out all the plants that might be extremely helpful to cure diseases for people. There would be more things that governments and individuals should take into considerations, specifically the pollution and the global warming. The nature has been suffering severely from our daily activities. For example, we are exhausting fumes from vehicles on the roads into the atmosphere, which is detrimental to people's heath. Furthermore, we are living in the Earth when the global temperature has been remarkably increasing. It is making the glaciers at the poles melt and causes the species that live there to the death. Perhaps everyone knows that, but these urgent problems really need to be given the top priority and proper solutions to deal with. In conclusion, I am convinced that these days, our production and dongs have posed too many environment threats to humans. It is not a simple and easy task and if we still do not start doing something, it would be the end of our planet.
It is true that human beings are facing the most difficult challenges to overcome that are the environmental issues. While I accept that we should
keep
an eye on regaining and recovering the fauna and flora from extinction, I believe that there are more main problems needing to
be solved
out.

People
often
discuss about the
decrease in the amount of species in the wildlife, in terms of plants and animals. The past decades have
seen
a great loss in the animal kingdom due to our killing too
many
of them for food, their furs, etc.
In addition
, we have been devastating their habitats to
make
farms which breeds their being on the edge of complete extinction. In fact, regular
deforestations
are cutting down on large areas of forests and
therefore
, it would wipe out all the plants that might be
extremely
helpful to cure diseases for
people
.

There would be more things that
governments
and individuals should take into considerations,
specifically
the pollution and the global warming. The nature has been suffering
severely
from our daily activities.
For example
, we are exhausting fumes from vehicles on the roads into the atmosphere, which is detrimental to
people
's heath.

Furthermore
, we are
living in the Earth
when the global temperature has been
remarkably
increasing. It is making the glaciers at the poles melt and causes the species that
live
there to the death. Perhaps everyone knows that,
but
these urgent problems
really
need to be
given
the top priority and proper solutions to deal with.

In conclusion
, I
am convinced
that these days, our production and dongs have posed too
many
environment threats to humans. It is not a simple and easy task and if we
still
do not
start
doing something, it would be the
end
of our planet.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the main environmental problems of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1

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  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
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