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Some people believe that the government spends too much money on developing space exploration technology. There are many others financial needs that the government should address instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people believe that the government spends too much money on developing space exploration technology. There are many others financial needs that the government should address instead. v. 3
In this era most of the countries around the world spend enormous amount of money for space research. However some people believe, this is mere wastage of money and governments must spend money on more important needs such as education and health care e. t. c. whereas some people feel space research is important. I support the former view as many people around the globe struggling to meet their basic needs. The people who support the space research have their own reasons to justify their argument. First of all, the planet we are currently living in faces many threats such as global warming and nuclear war, which will eradicate human life from the face of the Earth. So it is essential to find another planet which have the same features of the Earth. If the scientists find another planet human life will sustain, otherwise it will end up in drastic extinction with in few centuries. Another point they put forward is, attack of the aliens from a different planet. Scientists suspect that there may be another planet with life and people from there attack the Earth any time in order to save mankind from aliens space research has a vital role. for example, recently, famous scientist mr: hockings opined that aliens can come any time to earth and they also searching another planet with life. On the other hand all the above mentioned arguments can be conquered with arguments against space research. first and foremost, a majority of people in the world struggling for the basic needs food, cloth and shelter. Hence, it does not make sense to spend huge amount of money for the space research. It is the responsibility of the governments in the developed world to extend a helping hand to the poor people third world nations instead of spending money on space research. Another important point is governments spend money for space research for many decades but until now they could not find anything substantially. Moreover, many space shuttles have been sent to the space to obtain knowledge about other planets. The fuels for these vehicles produce a lot pollution to our atmosphere. To conclude, I strongly feel governments around the globe should spend money for human beings well being instead of wasting it on space research.
In this era most of the countries around the
world
spend
enormous amount of
money
for
space
research
.
However
some
people
believe, this is mere wastage of
money
and
governments
must
spend
money
on more
important
needs such as education and health care e. t. c. whereas
some
people
feel
space
research
is
important
. I support the former view as
many
people
around the globe struggling to
meet
their basic needs.

The
people
who support the
space
research
have their
own
reasons to justify their argument.
First of all
, the
planet
we are
currently
living in faces
many
threats such as global warming and nuclear war, which will eradicate human life from the face of the
Earth
.
So
it is essential to find another
planet
which have the same features of the
Earth
. If the scientists find another
planet
human life will sustain,
otherwise
it will
end
up in drastic extinction with in few centuries. Another point they put forward is, attack of the aliens from a
different
planet
. Scientists suspect that there may be another
planet
with life and
people
from there attack the
Earth
any time in order to save mankind from aliens
space
research
has a vital role.
for
example, recently,
famous
scientist
mr
:
hockings
opined that aliens can
come
any time to
earth and
they
also
searching another
planet
with life.

On the other hand
all the above mentioned arguments can
be conquered
with arguments against
space
research
.
first
and foremost, a majority of
people
in the
world
struggling for the basic needs food, cloth and shelter.
Hence
, it does not
make
sense to
spend
huge amount of
money
for the
space
research
. It is the responsibility of the
governments
in the developed
world
to extend a helping hand to the poor
people
third
world
nations
instead
of spending
money
on
space
research
. Another
important
point is
governments
spend
money
for
space
research
for
many
decades
but
until
now
they could not find anything
substantially
.
Moreover
,
many
space
shuttles have been
sent
to the
space
to obtain knowledge about other
planets
. The fuels for these vehicles produce
a lot pollution
to our atmosphere.

To conclude
, I
strongly
feel
governments
around the globe should
spend
money
for human beings
well being
instead
of wasting it on
space
research
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the government spends too much money on developing space exploration technology. There are many others financial needs that the government should address instead. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
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