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Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v.2

Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v. 2
It is often stated that some people are born to be a leader. However, many people assume that a good leader may achieve leadership skill due to social interaction. Personally, I reckon to the second statement that to be a leader means to have the ability to understand some needs of the public and having proper behaviour and the leadership quality is achieved rather than to born with. To begin with, the leadership qualities may trigger when there are crisis or opportunities in a community or a particular place which allows individuals to step forward and take some responsibilities. These characteristics occur to respond the social requests for overcoming some obstacles in that place. For example, when there is an election in a region, some individuals can register to be a leader, however, the only way to ensure the real figure is by giving matters to solve which may prove their leadership ability. Therefore, people who gain some input from society may have better qualities than people who have less interaction ability. Furthermore, it is believed that person in charge should respect one another. It means that they could manage and embrace people from various types. At the same time, the leader should treat others equally regardless their background and social status. Treating people equally might seem challenging in term of social satisfaction. However, if a leader can solve this issue, they will be known as a real leader. Some people are born with leadership quality as per many people’s opinion. But I believe that leadership is a quality which is related to someone’s personality, social influence, motivation and ambition. It is not unusual that we have so many great leaders in our history who simply responded to the need of time and stepped forward to help others. Leadership is a quality we must learn and feel passionate about. In conclusion, some qualities of leadership could not be achieved as a gift or destiny, yet it takes time and effort. Being friendly to society may become indispensable aspect to reach that goal since this opportunity provides people to engage deeply.
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people
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leader
.
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,
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many
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people
assume that a
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good
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leader
may achieve
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leadership
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skill
due to
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social
interaction.
Personally
, I reckon to the second statement that to be a
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leader
means to have the ability to understand
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some
needs of the public and having proper
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behaviour
and the
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leadership
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quality
is achieved
rather
than to born with.

To
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begin
with, the
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leadership
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qualities
may trigger when there are crisis or opportunities in a community or a particular place which
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allows
individuals to step forward and take
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some
responsibilities. These characteristics occur to respond the
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social
requests for overcoming
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some
obstacles in that place.
For example
, when there is an election in a region,
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some
individuals can register to be a
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leader
,
however
, the
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only
way to ensure the real figure is by giving matters to solve which may prove their
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leadership
ability.
Therefore
,
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people
who gain
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some
input from society may have better
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qualities
than
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people
who have less interaction ability.

Furthermore
, it
is believed
that person in charge should respect one another. It means that they could manage and embrace
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people
from various types. At the same time, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leader
should treat others
equally
regardless their background and
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social
status. Treating
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people
equally
might seem challenging in term of
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social
satisfaction.
However
, if a
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leader
can solve this issue, they will
be known
as a real leader.

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Some
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people
are born
with
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leadership
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quality
as per
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many
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people’s
opinion.
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But
I believe that
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leadership
is a
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quality
which
is related
to someone’s personality,
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social
influence, motivation and ambition. It is not unusual that we have
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so
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many
great
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leaders
in our history who
simply
responded to the need of time and stepped forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
others.
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Leadership
is a
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quality
we
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must
learn and feel passionate about.

In conclusion
,
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some
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qualities
of
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leadership
could not
be achieved
as a gift or destiny,
yet
it takes time and effort. Being friendly to society may become indispensable aspect to reach that goal since this opportunity provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to engage
deeply
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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