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Some people believe that the good leaders ar eborn, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v.1

Some people believe that the good leaders ar eborn, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v. 1
Leadership has been the most demanding skill all of the time. In addition, this type of skill changes the life style of human being. Many people argue that leadering talent is given by the nature, however the others believe that everyone could have leadership skill during the life. What is the actual reason to represent good leader skill? In this essay, I will discuss both of opinions and give examples. The majority of cases, people show their talent since childhood period. Many of them could sing as a bird or have mathematical ability that solve tasks rapidly. Children might not good in a certain sphere, however it does prevent performing confident decisions that makes other people follow them and they might have never been taught that how to be a leader. In average statistics shows that most leaders are gifted by nature. In addition, most of them have achieved their best results. In contrast, psychologists and researchers already found out that anyone can obtain a great deal of skills such as singing, leadership and etc. For instance, many leaders share their successful experiences to audiences, therefore it makes more convenient to be a leader as well. Although some people consider that obtaining leadership skill is as easy as falling off a log. Furthermore, many of them might have a fault, thereby there are a likelihood of giving up learning the skills. To sum up, everybody could improve leadership skill, so it does not matter are you talented or not. Also many coaches and trainers help for obtaining ones’ skills. In my view, for getting any kind of abilities depends on you.
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leadership
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during the life. What is the actual reason to represent
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good
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leader
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? In this essay, I will discuss both of opinions and give examples.

The majority of cases,
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people
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their talent since childhood period.
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of them could sing as a bird or have mathematical ability that solve tasks
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in a certain sphere,
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performing confident decisions that
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follow
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. In average statistics
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that most
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are gifted
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contrast, psychologists and researchers already found out that anyone can obtain a great deal of
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share their successful experiences to audiences,
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makes
more convenient to be a
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as well
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is as easy as falling off a log.
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,
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of them might have a fault, thereby there are a likelihood of giving up learning the
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To sum up, everybody could
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,
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coaches and trainers
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for obtaining ones’
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. In my view, for getting any kind of abilities depends on you.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the good leaders ar eborn, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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