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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least ine possible solution. v.14

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least ine possible solution. v. 14
Citizens are allowed to use either private cars or public transportation. Although, some argue that people choose private cars because it has become a significant role in their life style. In this essay, I will show problems relating to overreliance on automobiles and give some solution. One big problem facing cities is pollution from vehicles. Most urban areas are full of cars, particularly during the rush hour. For instance, in Tashkent, there is often gridlock at peak times. As a result, air quality is deteriorating, and rates of asthma are rising. The answer to increase tax on petrol. This would encourage people to leave their cars at home. Another problem is that the troubles of getting to the destination. It is common these days for people who drives a private car for commuting rather than using public transportation. For instance, in modern city such as Fergana, public transportation system is undeveloped, therefore people use their private cars is used for passengers commuting. To address this issue, the government could increase a number and type of public transports such as buses, hi-speed railways. This would hopefully people tend to use more public transport rather than private cars. To summarize, using public transports has become a much less popular in many countries, due to the reasons such as increasing of private cars. This is a serious problem, and rising tax on petrol and enlarge public transportation system could be optimal solution for this issue. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem is lies between people and the government.
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use
either
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private
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cars
or
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public
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transportation
. Although,
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some
argue that
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people
choose
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private
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cars
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because
it has become a significant role in their life style. In this essay, I will
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show
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problems
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overreliance
on automobiles and give
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some
solution.

One
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big
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problem
facing cities is pollution from vehicles. Most urban areas are full of
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cars
,
particularly
during the rush hour.
For instance
, in Tashkent, there is
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often
gridlock at peak times.
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, air quality is deteriorating, and rates of asthma are rising. The answer to increase tax on petrol. This would encourage
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people
to
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leave
their
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cars
at home.

Another
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problem
is that the troubles of getting to the destination. It is common these days for
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people
who
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drives
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car
for commuting
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transportation
.
For instance
, in modern city such as
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Fergana
,
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public
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system
is undeveloped
,
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people
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cars
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used
for passengers commuting. To address this issue, the
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government
could increase a number and type of
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public
transports such as buses, hi-speed railways. This would
hopefully
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people
tend to
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use
more
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public
transport
rather
than
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private
cars.

To summarize
, using
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public
transports has become a much less popular in
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many
countries, due to the reasons such as increasing of
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private
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cars
. This is a serious
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problem
, and rising tax on petrol and enlarge
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public
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transportation
system could be optimal solution for this issue. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
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problem
is lies between
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people
and the
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government
.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least ine possible solution. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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