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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.4

Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. v. 4
Some argue that the high speed and pressure of today's lives adversely affect families. I completely agree that the fast pace and stress have negative effects on family life. Firstly, this essay will discuss the consequences of not spending enough time with family and secondly, discuss how job weight affects marriage. Spending less time with family is the cause of a range of family problems. Members do not meet each other often or with their assistance when needed. As a result, they feel lonely in their own family, so slowly family members become strangers. For example, children born and raised in families whose parents are busy with task often do not feel family affection and are easily seduced and dragged into social evils. Eventually, a conflict began to rise, parents blaming each other for the problems of their children, fading family sentiments and broken family background. Broken marriages often start with a career weight. People cannot get rid of everything at the company and often bring them home. When a person is under a lot of stress, they are no longer rational and loving enough to act properly with those around them, especially their spouse. The two begin to reveal and develop weaknesses that make their partners tired and gradually depressed. A recent survey has shown that the rate of breakage in marriage in high-pressure industries is much higher than in other fields. In conclusion, I totally agree that with the view that family life is heavily influenced by the pressures and hustle of modern society.
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argue that the high speed and pressure of
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today
's
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lives
adversely
affect
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families
. I completely
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agree
that the
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fast
pace and
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stress
have
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negative
effects on
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family
life.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the consequences of not spending
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enough
time with
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family
and
secondly
, discuss how job weight affects marriage.

Spending less time with
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family
is the cause of a range of
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family
problems. Members do not
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meet
each other
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often
or with their assistance when needed.
As a result
, they feel lonely in their
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own
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family
,
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so
slowly
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family
members become strangers.
For example
, children born and raised in
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families
whose parents are busy with task
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often
do not feel
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family
affection and are
easily
seduced and dragged into social evils.
Eventually
, a conflict began to rise, parents blaming each other for the problems of their children, fading
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family
sentiments and broken
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family
background.

Broken marriages
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often
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start
with a career weight.
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People
cannot
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get
rid of everything at the
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company
and
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often
bring them home. When a person is under
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a lot of
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stress
, they are no longer rational and loving
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enough
to act
properly
with those around them,
especially
their spouse. The two
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begin
to reveal and develop weaknesses that
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make
their partners tired and
gradually
depressed. A recent survey has shown that the rate of breakage in marriage in high-pressure industries is much higher than in other fields.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
that with the view that
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family
life is
heavily
influenced by the pressures and hustle of modern society.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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