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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.31

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 31
Nowadays, there a great number of courses in tertiary education. While, some people held that scholars should independently choose subjects for study, others argue they need to be directed in useful curriculums such as science or technology. While there are numerous subjects in institutions, I believe that students should select them by their preference. Students who have chosen their curriculum independently can succeed in their further career. Indeed, coming from future job sector an applicant select referral to universities. For example, while enrollee wants to become a biologist, he or she might not be studying history, also, no one can change his or her mind. Next, while student enter at the institution they will thirst to gain knowledge rather than those who guided to select a subject. Moreover, these students will self-motivated and have thought that they can be the best professional. It can be true that there are also subjects such as science and technology which can be useful in student’s life. As well as technology improves youth should know to deal with high tech gadgets. Furthermore, graduating science faculty might allow well-paid or job opportunities. However, if every student learns these subjects, humans will have issue with lacking professionals in other spheres. Also, if there is demand on a particular curriculum, entrant numbers might increase and exams will challenging. To sum up, while there is a choice in selecting university curriculum between individual and directed, due to additional motivational spirit, I think entrant should select his or her study by preference.
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held that scholars should
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subjects
for study, others argue they need to
be directed
in useful
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curriculums
such as science or technology. While there are numerous
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subjects
in institutions, I believe that
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students
should
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select
them by their preference.

Students who have chosen their
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curriculum
independently
can succeed in their
further
career.
Indeed
, coming from future job sector an applicant
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select
referral to universities.
For example
, while
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enrollee
wants to become a biologist, he or she might not be studying history,
also
, no one can
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change
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his or her
mind.
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, while
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student
enter at the institution they will thirst to gain knowledge
rather
than those who guided to
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select
a
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subject
.
Moreover
, these
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students
will self-motivated and have
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thought
that they can be the best professional.

It can be true that there are
also
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subjects
such as science and technology which can be useful in
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student’s
life.
As well
as technology
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improves
youth should know to deal with high tech gadgets.
Furthermore
, graduating science faculty might
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allow
well-paid or job opportunities.
However
, if every
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student
learns these
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subjects
, humans will have issue with lacking professionals in other spheres.
Also
, if there is demand on a particular
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curriculum
, entrant numbers might increase and exams will challenging. To sum up, while there is a choice in selecting university
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curriculum
between individual and directed, due to additional motivational spirit, I
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think
entrant should
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select
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his or her
study by preference.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 31

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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