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Some people believe that the best way to spend a holiday in a foreign country is to go out to meet people instead of staying in the hotel most of the time. what is your opinion? give reasons and include relevant examples from your own experience. v.2

Some people believe that the best way to spend a holiday in a foreign country is to go out to meet people instead of staying in the hotel most of the time. what is your opinion? give reasons and include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2
International traveling has become intensive and easy in today' s routine life due to several reasons of business, social, educational, personal interest and so on. Many people believe that one should spend their time by going out rather sitting in the hotel room. My inclination supports the thought due to an array of reasons which can be elaborated as follows. To commence with, going out can help to explore the horizon of different aspects of the location. Roaming hither & thither in the foreign country will not only help to connect with the people but also help to gather knowledge of a various field of that place like history, geography, landscape, weather and so on. Traveling out can surely quench the thirst of the people who thrive for the knowledge of various part of the world. Moreover, visiting and understanding alluring landscapes of the abroad location can motivate the artist of the different field for their innovative creations. What is more, communicating with local people can help to build up the global network which ultimately provides a common platform to connect globally to create a global culture. On the other hand, People have different sets of traits and choices. Some people like to explore the world while others like to rejuvenate themselves from within. By understanding this need, many people like to stay in the hotel rooms to get relax and refresh from the routine stress. Moreover, nowadays most hotels are providing a set of amenities for the recreation of their guest aboard. For instance, hotels arrange folk dance, cultural activities, food festivals, indoor games like golf, swimming and other spiritual activities like yoga, spa and so on. These activities keep their guest busy and fresh simultaneously. Finally, sometimes the purpose of the traveling is the search of peace and to be isolated from the outer world which holds people to stay in the hotel room in place of roaming out. All in all, the way of spending time is the matter of choice of an individual. However, I strongly believe in acquiring as much as possible from the strange country to be familier with it in place of staying back at a hotel room.
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people
believe that one should spend their time by going out
rather
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hotel
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. My inclination supports the
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thought
due to an array of reasons which can
be elaborated
as follows.

To commence with, going out can
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help
to explore the horizon of
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different
aspects of the location. Roaming hither
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&amp
; thither in the foreign country will not
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help
to connect with the
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people
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but
also
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help
to gather knowledge of a various field of that place like history, geography, landscape, weather and
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so
on. Traveling out can
surely
quench the thirst of the
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people
who thrive for the knowledge of various part of the world.
Moreover
, visiting and understanding alluring landscapes of the abroad location can motivate the artist of the
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different
field for their innovative creations.
What is more
, communicating with local
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people
can
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help
to build up the global network which
ultimately
provides a common platform to connect globally to create a global culture.

On the other hand
,
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People
have
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different
sets of traits and choices.
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Some
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people
like to explore the world while others like to rejuvenate themselves from within. By understanding this need,
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many
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people
like to stay in the
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hotel
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rooms
to
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get
relax and refresh from the routine
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stress
.
Moreover
, nowadays most
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hotels
are providing a set of amenities for the recreation of their guest aboard.
For instance
,
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hotels
arrange folk dance, cultural activities, food festivals, indoor games like golf, swimming and other spiritual activities like yoga, spa and
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so
on. These activities
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keep
their guest busy and fresh
simultaneously
.
Finally
,
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sometimes
the purpose of the traveling is the search of peace and to
be isolated
from the outer world which holds
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people
to stay in the
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hotel
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room
in place of roaming out.

All in all, the way of spending time is the matter of choice of an individual.
However
, I
strongly
believe in acquiring as much as possible from the strange country to be
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familier
with it in place of staying back at a
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hotel
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room
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the best way to spend a holiday in a foreign country is to go out to meet people instead of staying in the hotel most of the time. what is your opinion? give reasons and include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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