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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. v. 7
Education is becoming very expensive nowadays and there is a debate among people whether government should provide completely free education or not. I strongly believe that education should be available to everyone for free of cost. Some will advocate that tertiary education has to continue as a paid one. They argue that students who are all attending universities usually end up getting high paid jobs and it is ok to payback for the quality education. Also, if majority of the people can able to afford higher education it will be difficult to find workforce for manual jobs, which will affect the economy. Also, There is also another perspective for this issue, such as education is also basic right for all the citizen and government should make sure that there is no one left behind because of their financial status. It is hard to justify that young children cannot pursue higher education just because their parents are not rich enough to afford. Neighborhoods with less education opportunities always end up with high crime rates. Education will bring more socio-economic prosper. After considering both sides of the arguments, I completely agree that education should be available to all in spite of race, religion, gender, and economy status. It will make the education system fair and provide equal opportunities to all. Education is the major stepping stone to overcome any hurdles one might face in their life and government has responsibility to provide that to all. After all, an educated population is the biggest asset of any nation.
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is becoming
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expensive nowadays and there is a debate among
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people
whether
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government
should provide completely free
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education
or not. I
strongly
believe that
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education
should be available to everyone for free of cost.

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will advocate that tertiary
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education
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has to
continue as a paid one. They argue that students who are all attending universities
usually
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end
up getting high paid jobs and it is ok to payback for the quality education.

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, if
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majority of
the
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people
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can able to
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it will be difficult to find workforce for manual jobs, which will affect the economy.
Also
,

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also
another perspective for this issue, such as
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is
also
basic right for all the citizen and
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should
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make
sure that there is no one
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left
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because
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hard
to justify that young children cannot pursue higher
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education
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just
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because
their parents are not rich
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enough
to afford. Neighborhoods with less
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education
opportunities always
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end
up with high crime rates.

Education will bring more
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socio-economic
prosper.

After considering both sides of the arguments, I completely
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agree
that
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education
should be available to all
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in spite of
race, religion, gender, and economy status. It will
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make
the
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education
system
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fair
and provide equal opportunities to all.
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Education
is the major stepping stone to overcome any hurdles one might face in their life and
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government
has responsibility to provide that to all.
After all
, an educated population is the biggest asset of any nation.
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Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. v. 7

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
255 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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