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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.7

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 7
In modern times, the issue of where to teach children has become highly controversial. There are those who believe that home schooling is better for children, however others believe that children should go to school. In this essay I will examine both side of arguments and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are number of reasons why people believe that teaching at home is better for children. Perhaps the main reason why people believe that home schooling is beneficial is because they can get full attention from teacher. For example, if children are going in school or classes where only one teacher teaches many children, then teacher can not give full attention to each and every student. A further more reason in favour of educating at home is that they can feel comfortable. For instance, sometime some child feel uncomfortable to stay and study in crowd. Despite of these arguments, many people feel that child should go to school for a number of reasons. Firstly, they believe in this method because child can get number of skills such as communication skill, group discussion skill etc. Furthermore, they meet new people while go to school and they get more knowledge about outer world. To cite an example, if they meet new people then they can get information from other students, also they can share their feeling with friends which they can’t share with their parents or teachers. In conclusion, this is a topic which is very relevant to modern society. Having considered both side of arguments, I personally feel that children should go to school for their education rather than home schooling.
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home schooling
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,
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others
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should go to
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. In this essay I will examine both side of arguments and provide my
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opinion.

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. Perhaps the main
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, then teacher can not give full attention to each and every student. A
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then they can
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for their education
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home schooling
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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