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Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? v. 1
It argued that the government should increase air tax in order to reduce traffic in the sky. This essay disagrees with this statement because planes are more environment-friendlier then other transport and high tax will affect lower-class people. It is undoubtedly true that aircraft is more environment-friendlier than other vehicles. There are a variety of pollutions, for instance, traffic from buses, cars, and trains should be the primary concern. If the state will encourage us to pay more tax for air trips, then many of them will use ground transportation, which will lead to destroying the ecology of the earth. A recent study finds that 30% of carbon dioxide is produced by street vehicles. It is certainly true that, if the travel expenses for flights will not be cheap, it will affect the low-segment class. Because of that, people will lose their time for overseas visits which can take several days to get to the final destination. Otherwise, people with a low income will spend more on travelling, rather than buying important things which are more important for their well-being. Research shows that people selecting low-carriers such as BlueJat and Pobeda in order to cut their expenses and to consume important things that can be useful in their lives. Taking all these points into consideration, making the tax higher than now has financial drawbacks for poorer families and also this decision will be a reason for the dirty nature caused by non-ecological ground vehicles.
It argued that the
government
should increase air
tax
in order to
reduce
traffic in the sky. This essay disagrees with this statement
because
planes
are more environment-friendlier then other transport and high
tax
will affect lower-
class
people
.

It is
undoubtedly
true that aircraft is more environment-friendlier than other vehicles. There are a variety of pollutions,
for instance
, traffic from buses, cars, and trains should be the primary concern. If the state
will encourage
us to pay more
tax
for air trips, then
many
of them will
use
ground transportation, which will lead to destroying the ecology of the earth. A recent study finds that 30% of carbon dioxide
is produced
by street vehicles.

It is
certainly
true that, if the travel expenses for flights will not be
cheap
, it will affect the low-segment
class
.
Because
of that,
people
will lose their time for overseas visits which can take several days to
get
to the final destination.
Otherwise
,
people
with a low income will spend more on travelling,
rather
than buying
important
things which are more
important
for their well-being. Research
shows
that
people
selecting low-carriers such as
BlueJat
and
Pobeda
in order to
cut
their expenses and to consume
important
things that can be useful in their
lives
.

Taking all these points into consideration, making the
tax
higher than
now
has financial drawbacks for poorer families and
also
this decision will be a reason for the dirty nature caused by non-ecological ground vehicles.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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