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The Internet has brought many changes into our day to day life. Nowadays we can do things such as mailing, contacting, banking and communication much faster. Is this a positive or negative development? v.1

The Internet has brought many changes into our day to day life. Nowadays we can do things such as mailing, contacting, banking and communication much faster. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
The internet has revolutionized our lives. It has changed the way we connect with our friends and family. It has changed the way we access information and buy things. It has enabled people to work from their home. In my opinion, the internet has more positive impacts than negative impacts on our lives. The internet has made information accessible to everyone. Much of the content on the internet is free. Anyone who has an internet connection can access it from any part of the world. Having an internet connection is a bit like having access to all the books in the world. In my opinion, this is the biggest advantage of the internet. Because of it, people can now get medical and financial advice online. Students can prepare for their tests online. Internet also allows us to buy and sell things online from the comfort of our home. Online transactions save time and money. Another advantage of the internet is its ability to facilitate communication. Thanks to technologies such as video conferencing, people living in different parts of the world can now participate in online conferences at the same time. This eliminates the need for them to travel to another country just for the sake of attending a conference. The internet has its fair share of disadvantages too. Plenty of obscene and offensive content is available online. While surfing the internet, children might stumble upon this content accidentally. In recent times, anti-social elements have started using the internet to recruit youngsters. This has become a major threat to the security of nations. To conclude, the internet has both positive and negative impacts; however, in my opinion the positives outweigh the negatives. It has connected the world and made opportunities available to everyone. In fact, today, it is impossible for us to imagine a life without the internet.
The internet has revolutionized our
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lives
. It has
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changed
the way we connect with our friends and family. It has
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changed
the way we access information and
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buy
things.
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It
has enabled
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people
to work from their home. In my opinion, the internet has more
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positive
impacts than
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negative
impacts on our
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lives
.

The internet has made information accessible to everyone. Much of the content on the internet is free. Anyone who has an internet connection can access it from any part of the
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world
. Having an internet connection is a bit like having access to all the books in the
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world
. In my opinion, this is the biggest advantage of the internet.
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Because
of it,
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people
can
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now
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get
medical and financial advice
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online
. Students can prepare for their
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tests
online.

Internet
also
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allows
us to
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buy
and sell things
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online
from the comfort of our home.
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Online
transactions save time and money. Another advantage of the internet is its ability to facilitate communication. Thanks to technologies such as video conferencing,
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people
living in
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different
parts of the
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world
can
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now
participate in
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online
conferences at the same time. This eliminates the need for them to travel to another country
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just
for the sake of attending a conference.

The internet has its
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fair
share of disadvantages too.
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Plenty
of obscene and offensive content is available
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online
. While surfing the internet, children might stumble upon this content
accidentally
. In recent times, anti-social elements have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
using the internet to recruit youngsters. This has become a major threat to the security of nations.

To conclude
, the internet has both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts;
however
, in my opinion the positives outweigh the negatives. It has connected the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
and made opportunities available to everyone. In fact,
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today
, it is impossible for us to imagine a life without the internet.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay The Internet has brought many changes into our day to day life. Nowadays we can do things such as mailing, contacting, banking and communication much faster. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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