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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.34

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 34
Whether to send children at school or not is becoming increasingly controversial among parents. Many of us believe that a child must be taught in the house instead of school while others think that the schooling is the best way to teach. This essay will discuss the advantages of both the arguments and provide the evidence for the superiority of schooling. Studying at home will lead towards the personal attention on the kids as well as learning will be based on one's pace. The parents will know what are one's strengths and weaknesses better. For example, if a kid is slow in learning, the process of teaching will be based on its pace and personal guidance will be given to them. This will lead to the improvement in the performance. However, Schooling is important for children because getting taught by professionals indeed help them to perform better. This is because the method of teaching of a professional is far better than a parent because he knows the proper techniques to make the children learn in a better way. For example, an article published in the Times of New York said that 90% children have their fundamentals clear due to schooling. Moreover, kids learn better when they have a competitive environment around them. That is to say they will get a healthy competition which will make them study more and will ultimately help them in their progress. For example, comparing their results with other students or their friends make them prepare more for the next examination. To summarise, there would always be confusion whether a child should be enrolled in a school or studied at home. This essay discussed the benefits of both the arguments. In my opinion, Schooling is the best option to choose for children in their overall development and growth.
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is the best way to teach. This essay will discuss the advantages of both the arguments and provide the evidence for the superiority of schooling.

Studying at home will lead towards the personal attention on the kids
as well
as learning will
be based
on one's pace. The parents will know what are one's strengths and weaknesses
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better
.
For example
, if a kid is slow in learning, the process of teaching will
be based
on its pace and personal guidance will be
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given
to them. This will lead to the improvement in the performance.

However
,
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Schooling
is
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important
for
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children
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because
getting taught by professionals
indeed
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help
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because
the method of teaching of a professional is far
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better
than a parent
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because
he knows the proper techniques to
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children
learn in a
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, an article published in the Times of New York said that 90%
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children
have their fundamentals
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clear
due to
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schooling
.
Moreover
, kids learn
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better
when they have a competitive environment around them.
That is
to say they will
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get
a healthy competition which will
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make
them study more and will
ultimately
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help
them in their progress.
For example
, comparing their results with other students or their friends
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make
them prepare more for the
next
examination.

To
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summarise
, there would always be confusion whether a child should
be enrolled
in a school or studied at home. This essay discussed the benefits of both the arguments. In my opinion,
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Schooling
is the best option to choose for
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children
in their
overall
development and growth.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 34

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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