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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v.11

Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v. 11
Most of the students from local universities reside with their parents; however, whose universities are at a distance place, they have to search accommodations far away from home. Both staying with family and dwelling except relatives have the benefits as well as drawbacks. On the one hand, pupils prefer to inhabit with their family members, since they study at the local university. The compelling advantage is that they do not suffer regarding financial crises as rent, utility bills, and renovations cost. As a result, they can focus on study and improve their study skills. Another benefit is that students do not need to do their tasks alone, as parents and other members are there to execute tasks like washing, cleaning, dusting, et Cetra. Nevertheless, if learners choose to stay with family, they must abide by the rules and regulations assigned by their parents, which sometimes hamper their freedom. Furthermore, staying with family not only snatches student's independence in roaming the world, but parent even select what they should wear at home and parties. On the other hand, if tertiaries are at a greater distance or abroad, students have to live in the hostel. The greatest merit of living foreign countries is that there is no binding on anything such as eating, going out for a visit, meeting with friends at any time, et Cetra, which arise a sense of freedom. Moreover, students can set their tactics to resolve any kind of issues like handling the work of home and job. However, despite these benefits, it is an essential part of students to earn money for bearing all costs in their life. Besides, they are not only balancing their studies, but also take care of their outside activities which help them in earning. In conclusion, if tertiaries are located within a short distance, students can live with family, while when students select foreign countries to take a higher degree, they must be in the resident of overseas countries. Whatever learners choose to live, on each side, they get benefits as well as suffer from shortcomings.
Most of the
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students
from local universities reside with their
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parents
;
however
, whose universities are at a distance place, they
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have to
search accommodations far away from home. Both staying with
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family
and dwelling except relatives have the
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benefits
as well
as drawbacks.

On the one hand, pupils prefer to inhabit with their
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family
members, since they
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study
at the local university. The compelling advantage is that they do not suffer regarding financial crises as rent, utility bills, and renovations cost.
As a result
, they can focus on
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study
and
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improve
their
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study
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skills
. Another
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benefit
is that
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students
do not need to do their tasks alone, as
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parents
and other members are there to execute tasks like washing, cleaning, dusting,
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et
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Cetra
.
Nevertheless
, if learners choose to stay with
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family
, they
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must
abide by the
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rules
and regulations assigned by their
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parents
, which
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sometimes
hamper their freedom.
Furthermore
, staying with
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family
not
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only
snatches student's independence in roaming the world,
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but
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parent
even select what they should wear at home and parties.

On the other hand
, if
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tertiaries
are at a greater distance or abroad,
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students
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have to
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live
in the hostel. The greatest merit of living foreign countries is that there is no binding on anything such as eating, going out for a visit, meeting with friends at any time,
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et
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Cetra
, which arise a sense of freedom.
Moreover
,
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students
can set their tactics to resolve any kind of issues like handling the work of home and job.
However
, despite these
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benefits
, it is an essential part of
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students
to earn money for bearing all costs in their life.
Besides
, they are not
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only
balancing their
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studies
,
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but
also
take care of their outside activities which
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help
them in earning.

In conclusion
, if
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tertiaries
are located
within a short distance,
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students
can
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live
with
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family
, while when
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students
select foreign countries to take a higher degree, they
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must
be in the resident of overseas countries. Whatever learners choose to
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live
, on each side, they
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get
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benefits
as well
as suffer from shortcomings.
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IELTS essay Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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