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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v.32

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 32
Some people argue that teaching children at their homes is a more efficient mechanism for the child's development whilst others think that it's better to attend the classes at school instead of at home. However, I believe, by attending the lesson at primary schools will result with significant improvements in child. This essay will discuss the positive sides of the both views. On the one hand, by studying at home, time saving is the predominant benefit. Since pupil not required to commute every day to their registered schools as a result, it saves the parent's money for the commute charges. For instance, in the recent time, the junior schools in India, introduced an adhoc program for a limited period, study from home. With this program, it revealed surprising facts such as less traffic congestion around the schools and the parents saving increased 5 percentage. Moreover, pupil can avoid dangerous viral flu's. Because of the viral infections, students who suffer from the diseases in school has been decreased drastically. Considering the viral fever, with the cough and sneeze, it spreads easily to everyone. On the other hand, by attending the classes at school, it improves the problem solving and communication skills significantly. The major portion of child's development has been involved in the effective communication, these skills, play a vital role in their future growth. Additionally, the pupil has the chance to socialize. With the school environment teaching, the student usually talks to each other and get involved exchanging their ideas. As a result of this mechanism, children cognitive skills will be increased. In addition to that, by observing the nature and society, they will start thinking in their own perspective while they are in commute. To conclude, In my view, by attending classes at school approach has far more significance in child development rather than the studying at home
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Some
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people
argue that teaching children at their
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homes
is a more efficient mechanism for the child's development whilst others
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think
that it's better to attend the classes at
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school
instead
of at home.
However
, I believe, by attending the lesson at primary
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schools
will result with significant improvements in child. This essay will discuss the
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positive
sides of the both views.

On the one hand, by studying at home, time saving is the predominant benefit. Since pupil not required to commute every day to their registered
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
as a result
, it saves the parent's money for the commute charges.
For instance
, in the recent time, the junior
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
in India, introduced an
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adhoc
program for a limited period, study from home. With this program, it revealed surprising facts such as less traffic congestion around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
and the parents saving increased 5 percentage.
Moreover
, pupil can avoid
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
viral flu's.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of the viral infections, students who suffer from the diseases in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
has
been decreased
drastically
. Considering the viral fever, with the cough and sneeze, it spreads
easily
to everyone.

On the other hand
, by attending the classes at
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school
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
the problem solving and communication
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skills
significantly
. The major portion of child's development has
been involved
in the effective communication, these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, play a vital role in their future growth.
Additionally
, the pupil has the chance to socialize. With the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
environment teaching, the student
usually
talks to each other and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved exchanging their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
As a result
of this mechanism, children cognitive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
will
be increased
.
In addition
to that, by observing the nature and society, they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
thinking in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
perspective while they are in commute.

To conclude
, In my view, by attending classes at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
approach has far more significance in child development
rather
than the studying at home
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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