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some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.22

some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 22
It is no news that it’s been difficult to reach a conclusion over the decision to teach children in school or at home. As with every known trend, there are always advantages to both approaches and these inform the final decision of the parents. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages of both approaches and argue that it is highly essential for children to be instructed in the formal environment. Irrespective of opposite opinions, multiple advantages avail to support the case for home education. Are school shootings not reason enough for parents to decide in the favour of tutoring their kids within reach? Recent cases of repeated shooting at the traditional learning environments are reasons enough to justify this view. Also, teachers as careful as they may be may not have the wherewithal to control the speed of ill social influence among the kids under their control due to the large number and varying characters of the later. Considering these among others, parents are justified to enforce home schooling. The formal setting on the other side has unique benefits that cannot be overemphasized. The availability of various facilities and materials that are needed for every level of education makes its prospects unmatched by its home-approach counterpart, teaching aids and special equipment like sporting environment are just a handful. Although parents can show unparalleled love to their children, however, education is a process that thrives in the hands of trained personnel. Thus, parents may be unable to play a training-centred role, such as the identification of a child’s cognitive challenge, nor will they be able to take measures to salvage such learning situations, which would have been easily done in a formal learning environment. This makes the school process essential. Considering the benefits of both approaches without disregarding their risks, it is in my absolute that children go to school in order to make the best of the learning process and easily handle the challenges of life on their own later when faced by them. Summarily, considering the fact that the tutoring process of children has been up for debate till now, I strongly recommend that children go to school rather than being home tutored.
It is no news that it’s been difficult to reach a conclusion over the decision to teach
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children
in
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school
or at home. As with every known trend, there are always advantages to both approaches and these inform the final decision of the
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parents
. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages of both approaches and argue that it is
highly
essential for
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children
to
be instructed
in the formal environment.

Irrespective of opposite opinions, multiple advantages avail to support the case for home education. Are
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school
shootings not reason
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enough
for
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parents
to decide in the
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favour
of tutoring their kids within reach? Recent cases of repeated shooting at the traditional
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learning
environments are reasons
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enough
to justify this view.
Also
, teachers as careful as they may be may not have the wherewithal to control the speed of ill social influence among the kids under their control due to the large number and varying characters of the
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later
. Considering these among others,
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parents
are justified
to enforce
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home schooling
.

The formal setting on the other side has unique benefits that cannot
be overemphasized
. The availability of various facilities and materials that
are needed
for every level of education
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makes
its prospects unmatched by its home-approach counterpart, teaching aids and special equipment like sporting environment are
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just
a handful. Although
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parents
can
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show
unparalleled
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love
to their
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children
,
however
, education is a
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process
that thrives in the hands of trained personnel.
Thus
,
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parents
may be unable to play a
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training-centred
role, such as the identification of a child’s cognitive challenge, nor will they be able to take measures to salvage such
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learning
situations, which would have been
easily
done in a formal
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learning
environment. This
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makes
the
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school
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process
essential.

Considering the benefits of both approaches without disregarding their
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risks
, it is in my absolute that
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children
go to
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school
in order to
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make
the best of the
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learning
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process
and
easily
handle the challenges of life on their
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own
later when faced by them.

Summarily
, considering the fact that the tutoring
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process
of
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children
has been up for debate till
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now
, I
strongly
recommend that
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children
go to
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school
rather
than being home tutored.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 22

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
365 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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