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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v.14

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 14
Several people are of a viewpoint that the pupils should be taught in their homes for their progress; however, the opponents to this idea think that they should be sent to the school. This essay will discuss how constraint-free learning at homes, and structural teaching at educational institutions are advantageous. In my opinion, the schools do this job better as far as a child's development is concerned. On the one hand, learning at homes without any strict rules would help in better understanding of concepts by children. It is said that when students are happy, they grasp easily and retain for a long time; therefore, imparting long-lasting knowledge in them will surely benefit in their advancement. For example, a recent study in the UK has found that the educatees who study only at home have better conceptual knowledge than those who studied at the schools. On the other hand, teaching children at school is the traditional method followed everywhere in the world, and is a crucial factor for the better growth of pupils. Educational institutions have all the facilities that are required for teaching them; moreover, the schools have various teachers who have excellent skills and techniques to teach children in the best possible way. For instance, numerous studies have consistently found that if a child is not enrolled in a school, he or she will not be able to learn other aspects of life properly. In my opinion, both home and school learning play a vital role in a student's growth. To elaborate more, although the schools hold a higher place for learning, home studying is also necessary. To provide ample evidence, if a child does not do his homework given by the teachers at school, the growth is restricted. In conclusion, both studying at school and home are essential; nevertheless, school education has more significance than home learning. For overall development, a child should study at school, as well as at home.
Several
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people
are of a viewpoint that the pupils should
be taught
in their
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homes
for their progress;
however
, the opponents to this
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idea
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think
that they should be
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sent
to the
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school
. This essay will discuss how constraint-free
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learning
at
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homes
, and structural teaching at educational institutions are advantageous. In my opinion, the
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schools
do this job
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better
as far as a child's development
is concerned
.

On the one hand,
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learning
at
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homes
without any strict
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rules
would
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help
in
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better
understanding of concepts by children. It
is said
that when students are happy, they grasp
easily
and retain for a long time;
therefore
, imparting long-lasting knowledge in them will
surely
benefit in their advancement.
For example
, a recent
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study
in the UK has found that the
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educatees
who
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study
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only
at home have
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better
conceptual knowledge than those who studied at the schools.

On the other hand
, teaching children at
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school
is the traditional method followed everywhere in the world, and is a crucial factor for the
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better
growth of pupils. Educational institutions have all the facilities that
are required
for teaching them;
moreover
, the
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schools
have various teachers who have excellent
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skills
and techniques to teach children in the best possible way.
For instance
, numerous
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studies
have
consistently
found that if a child is not enrolled in a
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school
, he or she will not be able to learn other aspects of life
properly
.

In my opinion, both home and
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school
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learning
play a vital role in a student's growth. To elaborate more, although the
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schools
hold a higher place for
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learning
, home studying is
also
necessary. To provide ample evidence, if a child does not do his homework
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given
by the teachers at
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school
, the growth
is restricted
.

In conclusion
, both studying at
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school
and home are essential;
nevertheless
,
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school
education has more significance than home
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learning
. For
overall
development, a child should
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study
at
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school
,
as well
as at home.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 14

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
324 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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