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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Whether to learn history or not has always generated a heated argument amongst people. It is perceived by some people that studying history is irrelevant and has no beneficial value while some people are of the opinion that it is very important in order to benefit from past experiences. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument. In my opinion, I believe that the study of history is beneficial to the society. On the one hand, history makes us connected to the past and its study can be applied to present day cases, which could in turn be useful for future purposes. The reason is that it would be of benefit to be able to know more about past mistakes and challenges which have been encountered by people of the past. In addition, history also makes us appreciate nature and its process of evolution better. For instance, history of wars could help prevent wars from occurring in future. Furthermore, It is essential that it should be studied as it could also lead to better innovations. On the other hand, people that argued that studying history is a waste of time have stated that learning things of the past may be old fashioned and contribute lesser to the fast paced technological know how that we have in the modern day society. An example of this is studying the history of mountains which may not be really useful in an environment without its presence. In such cases, it may be deemed irrelevant and unnecessary. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that history is important to the development of the society, it possesses better advantages than disadvantages. This essay has been able to discuss some of the reasons history is important. It is hoped that government would incorporate this into the school curriculum.
Whether to learn
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history
or not has always generated a heated argument amongst
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people
. It
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some
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people
that studying
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history
is irrelevant and has no beneficial value while
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some
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people
are of the opinion that it is
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very
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important
in order to benefit from
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past experiences
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument. In my opinion, I believe that the study of
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history
is beneficial to the society.

On the one hand,
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history
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makes
us connected to the
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past
and its study can
be applied
to present day cases, which could in turn be useful for future purposes. The reason is that it would be of benefit to be able to know more about
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past
mistakes and challenges which have
been encountered
by
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people
of the
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past
.
In addition
,
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history
also
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makes
us appreciate nature and its process of evolution better.
For instance
,
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history
of wars could
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help
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prevent
wars from occurring
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in future
.
Furthermore
, It is essential that it should
be studied
as it could
also
lead to better innovations.

On the other hand
,
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people
that argued that studying
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history
is a waste of time have stated that learning things of the
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past
may be
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old fashioned
and contribute lesser to the
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fast
paced technological know how that we have in the modern day society. An example of this is studying the
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history
of mountains which may not be
really
useful in an environment without its presence. In such cases, it may
be deemed
irrelevant and unnecessary.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that
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history
is
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important
to the development of the society, it possesses better advantages than disadvantages. This essay has been able to discuss
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some of the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "reasons'" or "reason's"?
reasons
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history
is
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important
. It
is hoped
that
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government
would incorporate this into the school curriculum.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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