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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.12

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 12
It is desire of an every person to be successful in life. While there are those who are of the belief that success comes from taking risks, others hold that success is the outcome of careful planning. This essay will discuss both the views before arriving at a conclusion. Taking risks or chances, on the one hand, it is expedient method of becoming successful speedly, to cite an example, people engage themselves in fatal sports like car racing, invest huge sums of money in the big companies to become famous and rich overnight. It is greater the risks, it is said the bigger the reward, however, as the world, risks it implies risky ventures need not always be safe when they fail, they could be devastating to the risk takers such as success need not always come from by taking risks. On the other hand, careful planning can bring success, although the award brought by such means would not be important, it had better be admitted that it is safe and sound for instance, since no chances are taken and made, success is ushered it is the wise who follow this way for getting success in life. In conclusion, in the final analysis those who are daring and ambitious to become successful fast take risk. Although, it is profitable sometimes, failure can be equally destructive. Therefore, the more thoughtful people prefer to schedule their steps carefully so that the chances to end up to peral to minimal.
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success
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comes
from taking
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risks
, others hold that
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success
is the outcome of careful planning. This essay will discuss both the views
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before
arriving at a conclusion.

Taking
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risks
or chances, on the one hand, it is expedient method of becoming successful
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speedly
, to cite an example,
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people
engage themselves in fatal sports like car racing, invest huge sums of money in the
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big
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companies
to become
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famous
and rich overnight. It is greater the
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risks
, it
is said
the bigger the reward,
however
, as the world,
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risks
it implies risky ventures need not always be safe when they fail, they could be devastating to the
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risk
takers such as
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success
need not always
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come
from by taking
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risks
.

On the other hand
, careful planning can bring
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success
, although the award brought by such means would not be
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important
, it had better
be admitted
that it is safe and sound
for instance
, since no chances
are taken
and made,
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success
is ushered
it is the wise who follow this way for getting
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success
in life.

In conclusion
, in the final analysis those who are daring and ambitious to become successful
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fast
take
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risk
. Although, it is profitable
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sometimes
, failure can be
equally
destructive.
Therefore
, the more thoughtful
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people
prefer to schedule their steps
carefully
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so
that the chances to
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end
up to
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peral
to minimal.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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