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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy have been encouraged to be used by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development? v.3

Fossil fuels are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy have been encouraged to be used by some countries. v. 3
Fossil fuels known as one of the most important resources of energy in worldwide. Beside this, in recent decades, use of other sources of energy(e. g. wind, solar) increase strictly in many countries. I strongly believe that using of alternative resources have many advantages for individuals and governments. Hence, I think they are positive investment. There are several reasons for this view that alternative sources such as wind or solar are beneficial for people. In my view, the most important reason is, reduce pollution in cities also, decrease of disease among individuals. Nowadays, majority of cars as well as companies utilize of fossil fuels for energy production. Emission of toxic gases from these machines, like CO can have detrimental impacts on the individual’s health and Ozone layer. The hearth problem and breath damages because of inhaling toxic fumes in air are the sample of these diseases. In addition, penetrate of Ozone layer also, lead to publish of X-ray on the surface earth, that is destructive for human skin, and can become cause of skin illnesses. In contrast, Alternative sources, not only, do not have any above negative effects, but also help to clean air. Also, they are not harmful to people health. For this reason are suitable for using. Another reason for being benefit alternative resources is, they are infinity and cheaper than fossil fuels. According to the witnesses of, fossil fuels will finish by 2050. Therefore, the governments should find other sources for replacing it. Wind and sun are the best substitute for it because, they are accessible everywhere. Likewise, cost of their production is much inexpensive compared to the fossil fuels. We need to the advance technologies along with special equipment for drilling earth in order to extraction of petroleum or gas. But, for producing of solar energy, for example, we just require the number of plate placed in front of the sun. To sum up, utilization of replacing resources instead of fossil fuels, is an excellent idea, not only for people throughout the world because of reducing illnesses(e. g. heart ailment), but also is beneficial for government since, these sources are economical and available.
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resources of energy in worldwide. Beside this, in recent decades,
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use
of other
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sources
of energy(
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strictly
in
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many
countries. I
strongly
believe that using of
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alternative
resources have
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many
advantages for individuals and
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governments
.
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, I
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think
they are
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positive
investment.

There are several
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reasons
for this view that
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alternative
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sources
such as wind or solar are beneficial for
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people
. In my view, the most
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important
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reason
is,
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reduce
pollution in cities
also
, decrease of disease among individuals. Nowadays,
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majority of
cars
as well
as
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companies
utilize of
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fossil
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fuels
for energy production. Emission of toxic gases from these machines, like CO can have detrimental impacts on the individual’s health and Ozone layer. The hearth problem and breath damages
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because
of inhaling toxic fumes in air are the sample of these diseases.
In addition
, penetrate of Ozone layer
also
, lead to publish of X-ray on the surface earth,
that is
destructive for human skin, and can become cause of skin illnesses.
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,
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sources
, not
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only
, do not have any above
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negative
effects,
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also
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help
to clean air.
Also
, they are not harmful to
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people
health. For this
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reason
are suitable for using.

Another
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for being benefit
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alternative
resources is, they are infinity and cheaper than
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fossil
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fuels
. According to the witnesses of,
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fossil
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fuels
will finish by 2050.
Therefore
, the
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governments
should find other
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sources
for replacing it. Wind and sun are the best substitute for it
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because
, they are accessible everywhere.
Likewise
, cost of their production is much inexpensive compared to the
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fossil
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fuels
. We need to the advance technologies along with special equipment for drilling earth in order to extraction of petroleum or gas.
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But
, for producing of solar energy,
for example
, we
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just
require the number of plate placed in front of the sun.

To sum up, utilization of replacing resources
instead
of
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fossil
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fuels
, is an excellent
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idea
, not
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only
for
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people
throughout the world
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because
of reducing illnesses(
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e. g.
heart ailment),
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but
also
is beneficial for
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government
since, these
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sources
are economical and available.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy have been encouraged to be used by some countries. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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