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Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. v. 1
Friendship is an inevitable component of our lives. Few people think its better to have friends who have the same opinion as them. But others think mates who disagree with them sometimes, will make good peers. In my opinion, we need to have friends who does not completely agree with us all the time. This is because none of us are perfect. We all make mistakes. And we need people around us to point out where we went wrong. Yes, friends who disagree could lead to arguments, but I think, this could light up our negative sides and help us to correct our steps. One such incident happened a few weeks back, I remember it was a weekend and I was playing cricket with my mates. There was an argument which happened after a run out. Most of the people were of the opinion that the batsman has to just touch the line to be safe, but few others told, the bat has to cross the line. This lead to further discussion and cross checking, to understand that the bat has to cross the line. Thanks to those who disagreed with the majority opinion, which lead us to the right decision. We have to also agree, sometimes that, its wise to choose friends who always have the same opinion. This is because there will be activities and trips we participate as a group. If all friends have the similar way of thinking, it will be much easier to decide the destination and activities. Last New Year Eve, Me and my friends planned on visiting a place enjoy some quality time. Fortunately, everyone unanimously supported by the idea of going to a hill station. If there was a difference in opinion among us, it could have surely led to arguments and it could have even spoiled the fun. In a nutshell, there are people who think it's better to choose friends who think the same way as they do, but there are other people who is of the opinion that, it's not necessary to have peers who always think similar way. I have always felt that, disagreeing friends make much better friends because their disagreements many a time led to new, valuable piece of information.
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with us all the time.

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none of us are perfect. We all
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mistakes. And we need
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around us to point out where we went
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friends
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disagree could lead to arguments,
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, this could light up our
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us to correct our steps. One such incident happened a few weeks back, I remember it was a
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weekend and
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people
were of the
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opinion
that the batsman
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has to
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touch the line to be safe,
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few others
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, the bat
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cross the line. This lead to
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discussion and
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cross checking
, to understand that the bat
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cross the line. Thanks to those
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who
disagreed with the majority
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opinion
, which lead us to the right decision.

We
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also
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,
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sometimes
that, its wise to choose
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friends
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always have the same
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. This is
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because
there will be activities and trips we participate as a group. If all
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friends
have the similar way of thinking, it will be much easier to decide the destination and activities. Last New Year Eve, Me and my
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friends
planned on visiting a place enjoy
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some
quality time.
Fortunately
, everyone
unanimously
supported by the
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idea
of going to a hill station. If there was a difference in
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opinion
among us, it could have
surely
led to arguments and it could have even spoiled the fun.

In a nutshell, there are
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who
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it's better to choose
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the same way as they do,
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is
of the
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opinion
that, it's not necessary to have peers
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always
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similar way. I have always felt that, disagreeing
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friends
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make
much better
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their disagreements
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a time led to new, valuable piece of information.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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