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Some people believe that students in school learn better when they learn in group whereas others believe students learn better when they study on their own. discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that students in school learn better when they learn in group whereas others believe students learn better when they study on their own. v. 1
In this era of cut-throat competition, the value of education has been surged up. While, It is thought by some people if students learn in groups they can develop their academic skills accurately others hold opposing view and opine that they can study easily by individually. this essay discuss both sides of arguments and then I will present my own perspective. one pertinent reason why humans think that group study is beneficial for students is that knowledge seekers can interchange their thoughts with each other. As, some pulpils which are brilliant in one subject like maths but weak in other subject such as science then they can learn acquire easily study together with other students and impart own talent among others. As a result, they will not only understand without strives by exchanging their skills but also they can sturdy their relationship bond and in this way they uplift their educational level. Despite the above considerations, the latter aspect of studying individually cannot be overlooked. A major merit of learning on their own is that students can learn their subjects neither any interference and nor wasting time on teaching others in this way they can learn according to their interest. consequently, pupils can concentrate on their studies and they get better scores in their examination. A recent conducted by ' A times of America' which revealed that students which study alone without any distractions they achieve higher scores in the academic field. To conclude, although, learning together in groups can give the opportunity to exchange their thoughts, yet, I strongly believe that instead of learning in groups, studying alone is higher advantageous in terms of giving more concentration on the study in order to top their streams rather than wasting their time on teaching others.
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cut
-throat competition, the value of education has
been surged
up. While, It is
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thought
by
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some
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people
if
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students
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learn
in
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groups
they can develop their academic
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skills
accurately
others hold opposing view and opine that they can
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study
easily
by
individually
.
The verb 'discuss' is plural. Did you mean: "this essay discusses"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
this essay discuss
both sides of arguments and then I will present my
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own
perspective.

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one
pertinent reason why humans
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think
that
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group
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study
is beneficial for
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students
is that knowledge seekers can interchange their thoughts with each
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other
. As,
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some
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pulpils
which are brilliant in one subject like
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maths
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but
weak in
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other
subject such as science then they can
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learn
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acquire
easily
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study
together with
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other
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students
and impart
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own
talent among others.
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, they will not
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only
understand without strives by exchanging their
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skills
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but
also
they
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can sturdy
their relationship bond and in this way they uplift their educational level.

Despite the above considerations, the latter aspect of studying
individually
cannot
be overlooked
. A major merit of learning on their
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own
is that
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students
can
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learn
their subjects neither any interference and nor wasting time on teaching others in this way they can
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learn
according to their interest.
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consequently
, pupils can concentrate on their
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studies and
they
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get
better scores in their examination. A recent conducted by '
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A times
of
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America&
#039; which revealed that
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students
which
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study
alone without any distractions they achieve higher scores in the academic field.

To conclude
, although, learning together in
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groups
can give the opportunity to exchange their thoughts,
yet
, I
strongly
believe that
instead
of learning in
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groups
, studying alone is higher advantageous in terms of giving more concentration on the
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study
in order to top their streams
rather
than wasting their time on teaching others.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that students in school learn better when they learn in group whereas others believe students learn better when they study on their own. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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