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49. Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But, others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opini v.1

49. Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But, others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. 1
People are divided on the issue of the subjects which teenagers should be required to study. Some believe that these young school goers should be made to study all subjects, whereas others say that they should be given the choice of studying subjects of their interest. This essay shall analyze both perspectives. I, personally side with the former view. I believe that in today' s competitive world, a broad knowledge is needed to succeed in any field. There are many reasons why some people hold the opinion that students should not have to study all the subjects and should be allowed to choose the subjects they want to study. They opine that in this case the students will probably be more enthusiastic about their study. In addition, if students are forced to study all subjects, they can easily lose interest in education. What is more, if all subjects are compulsory for studying, students will not have enough time to learn all of them properly; therefore, they will be constantly under a lot of pressure. However, I believe all subjects are of great importance and for the holistic development of the students they need to study all subjects equally at school level. Later on, during admission to the colleges, students can select the subjects of their choice and can explore them further. At that age they are mature enough to decide their subjects for themselves. At school level the student may not know what his real interests are. Furthermore, nowadays, the job market is very demanding and the recruiters select students who are skilled in various fields. Having the basic knowledge of varied subjects during school time definitely widens the horizons for the students. To add to it, it is a well-known fact that most subjects are related to each other in some way or the other. For example, a basic knowledge of mathematics is needed to excel in computer languages. Finally, I believe that it is up to the teachers to develop interest of the students in any subject. For instance, during my school days, my history teacher was so good that a boring subject like history was the favourite subject of the whole class. To sum up, it can be said that students should learn all subjects at school level, as they are not mature enough to know their real interests at school level and a broad knowledge is also needed for their holistic development.
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believe
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school
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study
all
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subjects
, whereas others say that they should be
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given
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subjects
of their
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interest
. This essay shall analyze both perspectives. I,
personally
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students
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all
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, they can
easily
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interest
in education.
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subjects
are compulsory for studying,
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students
will not have
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enough
time to learn all of them
properly
;
therefore
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constantly
under
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a lot of
pressure.

However
, I
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all
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subjects
are of great importance and for the holistic development of the
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students
they need to
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study
all
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subjects
equally
at
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school
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level
. Later on, during admission to the colleges,
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students
can select the
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subjects
of their choice and can explore them
further
. At that age they are mature
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enough
to decide their
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subjects
for themselves. At
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school
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level
the
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student
may not know what his real
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interests
are.

Furthermore
, nowadays, the job market is
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very
demanding and the recruiters select
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students
who
are skilled
in various fields. Having the basic
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knowledge
of varied
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subjects
during
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school
time definitely widens the horizons for the
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students
. To
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add
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it is a well-known fact that
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subjects
are related
to each other in
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some
way or the other.
For example
, a basic
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knowledge
of mathematics
is needed
to excel in computer languages.
Finally
, I
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believe
that it is up to the teachers to develop
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interest
of the
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students
in any
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subject
.
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, during my
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school
days, my history teacher was
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so
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good
that a boring
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subject
like history was the
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subject
of the whole
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.

To sum up, it can
be said
that
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students
should learn all
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subjects
at
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school
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level
, as they are not mature
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enough
to know their real
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interests
at
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school
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level
and a broad
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knowledge
is
also
needed for their holistic development.
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59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay 49. Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But, others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
406 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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