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Some people believe that sport has an important role in society. Others, however, feel that it is nothing more than a leisure activity for some people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.6

Some people believe that sport has an important role in society. Others, however, feel that it is nothing more than a leisure activity for some people. v. 6
Sport is a unifying tool in national development. Even though some people argue that it has no relevance in a community, saying that it is just a recreational activity, others believe that it plays a pivotal role in a nation. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide reasons why sports play a critical role in any society. Sport is a recreational function carried out during leisure time by some people. It then depends on the type of sport, since some sports are not physically tasking but rather involves mental task. A person who partakes in sports as a form of exercise will obviously fall into this category. A typical example, is an individual who plays games like Scrabble and chess. Sport becomes a fun-time activity if it is done just to past time and have fun. Sport on the other hand is a game carried out by skilled professionals who are trained in that area to compete for laurel. This could take several years of dedicated practice and experience in that area of sports. In other words, it has gone beyond just exercising to competing for a prize or reward. For example, it is difficult to see people engage in boxing just for leisure, because of the health implication and the level of physicality. Another is contesting for national pride. The role of sport in society cannot be over emphasized, as it is a source of employment and it is also used as a tool to bring people of different race and colour together. In conclusion, in as much I agree that sports can be to past-time or a form of exercise, I am of the opinion that it goes beyond that to a point that it is being used as a source of employment and also a unifying factor in society.
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play a critical role in any society.

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, since
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are not
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tasking
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rather
involves mental task. A person who partakes in
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sports
as a form of exercise will
obviously
fall into this category. A typical example, is an individual who plays games like Scrabble and chess.
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becomes a fun-time activity if it
is done
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to
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past time
and have fun.

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on the other hand
is a game carried out by skilled professionals who
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in that area to compete for laurel. This could take several years of dedicated practice and experience in that area of
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sports
.
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, it has gone beyond
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exercising to competing for a prize or reward.
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people
engage in boxing
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for leisure,
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of the health implication and the level of physicality. Another is contesting for national pride. The role of
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sport
in society cannot be over emphasized, as it is a source of employment and it is
also
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used
as a tool to bring
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people
of
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different
race and
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together.

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can be to past-time or a form of exercise, I am of the opinion that it goes beyond that to a point that it is being
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as a source of employment and
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IELTS essay Some people believe that sport has an important role in society. Others, however, feel that it is nothing more than a leisure activity for some people. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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