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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. v.19

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 19
A popular belief is that home assignment is beneficial for the children to enhance their prospect of success, while others consider that homework should not be assigned. This essay thinks that after- school hours children should engage themselves in some leisure activities like watching TV or playing sports to relax themselves. On the one hand, some people think that homework is helpful for the students to acquire better grades in their exams. Because when students do homework along with schoolwork, it strengthens their subject's understanding and concepts like mathematics, science, and languages. For example, a recent survey conducted by Cambridge University found; when students spent an hour per day for some practice, home exercises of the English language will significantly improve their language skills and, the student will improve their results. However, I believe homework gives extra stress; therefore, this is not an advisable approach. On the other hand, some feel that children should relax when they go back home from school. Relaxation of any form either, taking a power nap, watching Cartoon movies, playing indoor or outdoor sports, or spending time with friends will be extremely beneficial for children to recharge their batteries and prepare themselves for the next school day. A good illustration of this is; a recent report was published by the New York time revealed that Swedish school authorities are advised for absolute "no-homework" to students by their Government; upon violating, they will be penalized. Similarly, I believe the children's time after school should be exclusively to relax them. In conclusion, I believe that although it is good to study at home; however, it should be limited to, school because home time is to relax to obtain academic success.
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to enhance their prospect of success, while others consider that
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homework
should not
be assigned
. This essay
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that after-
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school
hours
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children
should engage themselves in
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some
leisure activities like watching TV or playing sports to
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relax
themselves.

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some
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people
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is helpful for the
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students
to acquire better grades in their exams.
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when
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students
do
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homework
along with schoolwork, it strengthens their subject's understanding and concepts like mathematics, science, and languages.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by Cambridge University found; when
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students
spent an hour per day for
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some
practice, home exercises of the English language will
significantly
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improve
their language
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skills
and, the
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student
will
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improve
their results.
However
, I believe
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homework
gives extra
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stress
;
therefore
, this is not an advisable approach.

On the other hand
,
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some
feel that
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children
should
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relax
when they go back home from
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school
. Relaxation of any form either, taking a power nap, watching Cartoon movies, playing indoor or outdoor sports, or spending
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time
with friends will be
extremely
beneficial for
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children
to recharge their batteries and prepare themselves for the
next
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school
day. A
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good
illustration of this is; a recent report
was published
by the New York
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time
revealed that Swedish
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school
authorities
are advised
for absolute
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no-homework
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to
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students
by their
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Government
; upon violating, they will
be penalized
.
Similarly
, I believe the children's
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time
after
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school
should be exclusively to
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relax
them.

In conclusion
, I believe that although it is
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good
to study at home;
however
, it should
be limited
to,
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school
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because
home
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time
is to
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relax
to obtain academic success.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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