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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.13

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 13
Some people think it is not a good idea for teachers to assign home study tasks to school children, while others say it is an essential part of learning. In my view, youngsters need to be assigned homework for better exam results because it gives them a chance at entering higher education. On the one hand, some people hold the view that too many home assignments is of no real benefit and becomes a burden to school children. This is because pupils spend their whole day studying at school and they feel tired after returning home, then they have the added stress of finishing their homework. To illustrate this, in Japan the majority of youngsters are under pressure to complete large amounts of homework. If they fail to finish their assignments they cannot get into a good high school. I think that pupils ought to be given home assignments but should not be put under this kind of pressure. On the other hand, others feel that homework plays a vital role in the development of knowledge for students. They believe this because it helps pupils understand school subjects better, which then gives them the opportunity to attain higher grades. For example, if a pupil regularly does mathematics or English studies at home, they will definitely expand their knowledge concerned with those topics, which could not be gained from solely studying at school. I agree with this view as it improves a child’s chances of entering tertiary education and eventually obtaining a well paid job. To conclude, although views differ with regard to whether children should be given homework or not. I believe home assignments are necessary to help pupils get high grades, which allows them to secure a place at university and improves their career prospects.
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for teachers to assign home study tasks to
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children, while others say it is an essential part of learning. In my
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, youngsters need to
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for better exam results
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is of no real benefit and becomes a burden to
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school
children. This is
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because
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pupils
spend their whole day studying at
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school and
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of finishing their
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. To illustrate this, in Japan the majority of youngsters are under pressure to complete large amounts of
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.
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under this kind of pressure.

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, others feel that
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plays a vital role in the development of knowledge for students. They believe this
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it
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understand
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subjects better, which then gives them the opportunity to attain higher grades.
For example
, if a
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pupil
regularly
does mathematics or English studies at home, they will definitely expand their knowledge concerned with those topics, which could not
be gained
from
solely
studying at
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school
. I
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agree
with this
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as it
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improves
a child’s chances of entering tertiary education and
eventually
obtaining a well paid job.

To conclude
, although
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views
differ with regard to whether children should be
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given
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homework
or not. I believe home
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are necessary to
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help
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pupils
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get
high grades, which
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allows
them to secure a place at university and
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improves
their career prospects.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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