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Some people believe that research into family history is useful for the next generations, while others claim that present and future are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that research into family history is useful for the next generations, while others claim that present and future are more important. v. 1
These days, modern people are keen to research into family history and ancestors. In this regard, some individuals believe that humans' future and present is essential rather than their past. After pondering this phenomenon, personally, I tend to think that exploring the past life of the ancestry is crucial for the predicting the prospective On the one hand, people may get to know about their origin more if they start investigating their past. Nowadays, it is true that many people are willing to forecast the prospective lifestyle of the humankind, and knowing the past is the key component on this prediction. Furthermore, the study about the family history can be extremely useful for the x generation, as the modern world is filled with new challenges. In this regard, the previous experiences and knowledge of the elderly people can solve the problems relating to their contrary. On the other hand, some people are reckoned to think that focusing on the prospective life is crucial. It is clear that ancestors' knowledge may not help with the new obstacles such as global warming, climate change and overpopulation, as they did not experience them. Moreover, many people believe that in the future, the origin of the individuals will not be as important as now. To illustrate, after the civil war in the USA, the greatest number of slaves had reached a freedom and independence, and now they live with indigenous Europeans in peace and silence. In conclusion, although many people are not willing to learn about their history, I believe that past attainments and practice is vital for forecasting the future, and preparing for the new challenges. In addition to this, the next generation also will get a benefit and advantage.
These days, modern
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are keen to research into family history and ancestors. In this regard,
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individuals believe that humans' future and present is essential
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than their
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past
. After pondering this phenomenon,
personally
, I tend to
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think
that exploring the
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past
life of the ancestry is crucial for the predicting the
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prospective


On the one hand,
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people
may
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get
to know about their origin more if they
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start
investigating their
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past
. Nowadays, it is true that
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many
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people
are willing to forecast the prospective lifestyle of the humankind, and knowing the
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past
is the key component on this prediction.
Furthermore
, the study about the family history can be
extremely
useful for the x generation, as the modern world
is filled
with new challenges. In this regard, the previous experiences and knowledge of the elderly
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people
can solve the problems relating to their contrary.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
are reckoned
to
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think
that focusing on the prospective life is crucial. It is
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clear
that ancestors' knowledge may not
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help
with the new obstacles such as global warming, climate
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change
and overpopulation, as they did not experience them.
Moreover
,
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many
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people
believe that in the future, the origin of the individuals will not be as
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important
as
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now
. To illustrate, after the civil war in the USA, the greatest number of slaves had reached a freedom and independence, and
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now
they
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live
with indigenous Europeans in peace and silence.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
are not willing to learn about their history, I believe that
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past
attainments and practice is vital for forecasting the future, and preparing for the new challenges.
In addition
to this, the
next
generation
also
will
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get
a benefit and advantage.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that research into family history is useful for the next generations, while others claim that present and future are more important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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