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Some people believe that people who have been in prison become good citizens later. It is often argued that these people are the best to guide teenagers about committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe that people who have been in prison become good citizens later. It is often argued that these people are the best to guide teenagers about committing a crime. v. 2
Prisoners are the people who have experienced the tough consequences certain actions can lead to. Some people argue that these people know the best and could help teenagers from not taking any dramatic step in their lives. In my opinion, if a person has truly evolved after spending life in prison, surely they can have a great impact on other people lives. Teenage years are the ones in which a person is susceptible to lot of things and with an increased crime rate committed by teenagers, there are several reasons for criminals to help individuals. Firstly, a person who has been in the prison can explain in a better and deeper way the consequences one could have to face for wrong actions. They have examples and more importantly, they understand the other individual better as at some point, they can inter relate. Secondly, it is easier for them to judge the other person. So a prisoner can very easily predict the kind of trouble a teenager is having and under what circumstances can he or she take any drastic step. However, it is not necessary that a person who has been in jail understands the consequences. It is very likely to be possible that the person has no regrets going to jail. If someone like him or her, counsels a teenagers the outcome could be more devastating than expected. Even more, it is not obvious that a person who has been in jail can influence people to be better. In conclusion, a person who has faced the consequences of his or her actions can surely bring out change in the lives of others but it is not a compulsion. The most important thing is how well the people receive him or her and how well the person has evolved after the tenure in jail.
Prisoners are the
people
who
have experienced the tough consequences certain actions can lead to.
Some
people
argue that these
people
know the best and could
help
teenagers
from not taking any dramatic step in their
lives
. In my opinion, if a
person
has
truly
evolved after spending life in prison,
surely
they can have a great impact on
other
people
lives
.

Teenage years are the ones in which a
person
is susceptible to
lot of
things and with an increased crime rate committed by
teenagers
, there are several reasons for criminals to
help
individuals.
Firstly
, a
person
who
has been in the prison can
explain
in a better and deeper way the consequences one could
have to
face for
wrong
actions. They have examples and more
importantly
, they understand the
other
individual better as at
some
point, they can inter relate.
Secondly
, it is easier for them to judge the
other
person
.
So
a prisoner can
very
easily
predict the kind of trouble a
teenager
is having and under what circumstances can he or she
take
any drastic step.

However
, it is not necessary that a
person
who
has been in
jail
understands the consequences. It is
very
likely to be possible that the
person
has no regrets going to
jail
. If someone like him or her, counsels a
teenagers
the outcome could be more devastating than
expected
. Even more, it is not obvious that a
person
who
has been in
jail
can influence
people
to be better.

In conclusion
, a
person
who
has faced the consequences of
his or her
actions can
surely
bring out
change
in the
lives
of others
but
it is not a compulsion. The most
important
thing is how well the
people
receive him or her and how well the
person
has evolved after the tenure in
jail
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that people who have been in prison become good citizens later. It is often argued that these people are the best to guide teenagers about committing a crime. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
5.5
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