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Some people believe that it is impossible to help everyone in need around the world. That is why governments should only focus on helping people of their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and v.2

Some people believe that it is impossible to help everyone in need around the world. That is why governments should only focus on helping people of their own country. with this statement? Give your own opinion and v. 2
The role of one government to support citizens of other countries has been a major topic of concern in today’s society. From my perspective, this practice is feasible and there are compelling reasons why governments should help people in the global community rather than only focusing on the citizens of their own countries. In this context of globalization and international integration, the provision of assistance for peoples of all countries in the world is not an impossible task anymore. One explanation for this is that modern means of transport have transformed the way that international assistance could be given, and now assistance could reach even the most remote places on Earth. For example, thousands of victims of a deadly earthquake in a mountainous city in Nepal were rescued by US and German military helicopters in 2014. One further explanation is that thanks to international banking, the international community could offer a helping hand to any country where the financial system is on the verge of collapse. An excellent example of this is that the saving money of millions of taxpayers and pensioners in Greece was saved by a timely act of the European Commission of injecting a huge amount of bailout money into Greek banks in 2009. I strongly believe any government must assume the responsibility of helping citizens in other countries. This is mainly because assisting inhabitants in other countries, to some extent, is synonymous to assisting people in the home country. In 2014, hundreds of US and UK doctors and nurses were sent to African countries to cope with the outbreak of Ebola, a dreadful plague, which had killed many thousands by that time. This action prevented the plague from further spreading to other nations, including the US and the UK themselves, considering that there was a free movement of people between countries and there were millions of African migrant workers in the US and the UK at that time. In addition, the act of supporting people all around the world may promote a sense of humanity, which is essential to the sustainable development of the world, because humanity is the foundation of peace and stability.
The role of one
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government
to support citizens of
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other
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countries
has been a major topic of concern in
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today
’s society. From my perspective, this practice is feasible and there are compelling reasons why
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governments
should
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help
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people
in the global community
rather
than
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only
focusing on the citizens of their
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own
countries.

In this context of globalization and
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international
integration, the provision of assistance for
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peoples
of all
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countries
in the world is not an impossible task anymore. One explanation for this is that modern means of transport have transformed the way that
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international
assistance could be
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given
, and
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now
assistance could reach even the most remote places on Earth.
For example
, thousands of victims of a deadly earthquake in a mountainous city in Nepal
were rescued
by US and German military helicopters in 2014. One
further
explanation is that thanks to
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international
banking, the
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international
community could offer a helping hand to any
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country
where the financial system is on the verge of collapse. An excellent example of this is that the saving money of millions of taxpayers and pensioners in Greece
was saved
by a timely act of the European Commission of injecting a huge amount of bailout money into Greek banks in 2009.

I
strongly
believe any
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government
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must
assume the responsibility of helping citizens in
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other
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countries
. This is
mainly
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because
assisting inhabitants in
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other
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countries
, to
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some
extent, is synonymous to assisting
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people
in the home
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country
. In 2014, hundreds of US and UK doctors and nurses were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to African
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countries
to cope with the outbreak of Ebola, a dreadful plague, which had killed
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many
thousands by that time. This action
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prevented
the plague from
further
spreading to
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other
nations, including the US and the UK themselves, considering that there was a free movement of
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people
between
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countries
and there were millions of African migrant workers in the US and the UK at that time.
In addition
, the act of supporting
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people
all around the world may promote a sense of humanity, which is essential to the sustainable development of the world,
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because
humanity is the foundation of peace and stability.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is impossible to help everyone in need around the world. That is why governments should only focus on helping people of their own country. with this statement? Give your own opinion and v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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