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Some people believe that newspaper is the best way to learn about news, while others believe that the more effective method is through other types ofmedia. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that newspaper is the best way to learn about news, while others believe that the more effective method is through other types ofmedia. v. 1
There has always been a considerable debate on funding provided by charity firms. Some individuals claim that non-profitable institutes should serve the residents of their nation only, while others argue that these organisations should extend help to anyone in need irrespective of where they reside. This essay will discuss both the arguments in detail and provide evidence why helping every needy human is more ethical and beneficial. Examining the former viewpoint, supporters explain that offering funds by charitable trusts should be restricted to their land. To begin with, by providing aid to their own people, the burden on the government to look after its people would reduce. Consequently, the authority can utilise these money in various other tasks. To illustrate, as the government is unable to reach every individual, these organisations would help them with the basic necessities of life. Furthermore, it is truly said that charity begins at home, thus, if limited funds are available, it is often advisable to help vulnerable citizens of country on priority. On the other hand, some are of the opinion that such firms should consider donating to people of any nationality. The primary reason is that it would certainly develop cordial relationships with other nations while enhancing the sense of trust and peace amongst the people. For instance, fundings from NGO's in countries such as the United States and Europe, are being utilised in underdeveloped areas of India to provide them with food, shelter and education. In addition, this act would not only enhance the reputation of the organisation in the society, but also attract more people to donate and raise the amount. As a result, they can possibly reach many rural areas with sufficient funds. Therefore, although belonging to another motherland, such trusts should aid the needy. In conclusion, despite people differ in their viewpoint, I firmly believe that charity foundation should definitely help the devastated even though they do not share the same land because of the aforementioned reasons.
There has always been a considerable debate on funding provided by charity firms.
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Some
individuals claim that non-profitable institutes should serve the residents of their nation
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only
, while others argue that these
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organisations
should extend
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help
to anyone in need irrespective of where they reside. This essay will discuss both the arguments in detail and provide evidence why helping every needy human is more ethical and beneficial.

Examining the former viewpoint, supporters
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explain
that offering funds by charitable trusts should
be restricted
to their land. To
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begin
with, by providing aid to their
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own
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people
, the burden on the
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government
to look after its
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people
would
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reduce
.
Consequently
, the authority can
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utilise
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these money
in various
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other
tasks. To illustrate, as the
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government
is unable to reach every individual, these
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organisations
would
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help
them with the
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basic necessities
of life.
Furthermore
, it is
truly
said that charity
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begins
at home,
thus
, if limited funds are available, it is
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often
advisable to
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help
vulnerable citizens of country on priority.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
are of the opinion that such firms should consider donating to
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people
of any nationality. The primary reason is that it would
certainly
develop cordial relationships with
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other
nations while enhancing the sense of trust and peace amongst the
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people
.
For instance
,
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fundings
from NGO's in countries such as the United States and Europe, are being
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utilised
in underdeveloped areas of India to provide them with food, shelter and education.
In addition
, this act would not
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only
enhance the reputation of the
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organisation
in the society,
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but
also
attract more
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people
to donate and raise the amount.
As a result
, they can
possibly
reach
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many
rural areas with sufficient funds.
Therefore
, although belonging to another motherland, such trusts should aid the needy.

In conclusion
, despite
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people
differ in their viewpoint, I
firmly
believe that charity foundation should definitely
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help
the devastated
even though
they do not share the same land
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because
of the aforementioned reasons.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that newspaper is the best way to learn about news, while others believe that the more effective method is through other types ofmedia. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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