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Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion. v. 3
Modernity has brought gigantic changes in the infrastructural development of offices and premises. Presently, the trend of having adequate space while designing the school buildings and offices is gaining prevalence. Some people assert that open space is required for additional purposes. Here, i would like to account for merits and demerits of this happening with my perception. There are manifold benefits of this trend. First and foremost, open spaces keep buildings fully ventilated and prevent rooms from suffocation. For instance, air passes through the rooms easily if a healthy space is kept inside the offices or rooms. Hence, it is essential to maintain space while making buildings. Space preserved in the rooms can be utilised to place other stuff such as chairs, printer and tables if official formalities rise in future. On the contrary, it has thorny side too. Numerous drawbacks can be put down behind this happening. Initially, it is really difficult to do sanitation everyday if the room size is bigger than normal. Surplus amount of money has to be invested if space is extended inside the rooms. To demonstrate, management has to invest extra money on materials such as floor tiles, paints, decorative material and so on. People who sit in the rooms cannot listen the voice properly if rooms are oversized. From my notion, both sides have their own significance. Undeniably, keeping extra space has some disadvantages. However, multifarious benefits such as proper ventilation, decoration, and commodities arrangements could be availed under the presence of extra availability of space. Thus, official authorities must have open space in order to prevent themselves from inconvenience. To recapitulate, architectural skills enhance the elegance of modern premises. It is essential to maintain proper space in the buildings to find out the best comforts and arrangements.
Modernity has brought gigantic
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changes
in the infrastructural development of offices and premises.
Presently
, the trend of having adequate
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space
while designing the school
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buildings
and offices is gaining prevalence.
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Some
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people
assert that open
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space
is required
for additional purposes. Here,
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i
would like to account for merits and demerits of this happening with my perception.

There are manifold benefits of this trend.
First
and foremost, open
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spaces
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keep
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buildings
fully
ventilated and
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prevent
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rooms
from suffocation.
For instance
, air passes through the
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rooms
easily
if a healthy
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space
is
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kept
inside the offices or
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rooms
.
Hence
, it is essential to maintain
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space
while making
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buildings
.
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Space
preserved in the
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rooms
can be
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utilised
to place other stuff such as chairs, printer and tables if official formalities rise
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in future
.
On the contrary
, it has thorny side too.

Numerous drawbacks can
be put
down behind this happening.
Initially
, it is
really
difficult to do sanitation
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everyday
if the
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room
size is bigger than normal. Surplus amount of money
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has to
be invested
if
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space
is extended
inside the
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rooms
. To demonstrate, management
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has to
invest extra money on materials such as floor tiles, paints, decorative material and
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so
on.
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People
who sit in the
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rooms
cannot listen the voice
properly
if
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rooms
are oversized
.

From my notion, both sides have their
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own
significance.
Undeniably
, keeping extra
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space
has
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some
disadvantages.
However
, multifarious benefits such as proper ventilation, decoration, and commodities arrangements could
be availed
under the presence of extra availability of
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space
.
Thus
, official authorities
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must
have open
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space
in order to
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prevent
themselves from inconvenience.

To recapitulate, architectural
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skills
enhance the elegance of modern premises. It is essential to maintain proper
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space
in the
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buildings
to find out the best comforts and arrangements.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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