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Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.5

Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. 5
Nowadays, many people move to big cities, whether in search of a better life or job opportunities. Although some people think that activity in urban areas is getting harder, others think that living is easy. This essay will analyse the benefits and drawbacks of living in the cities. There are some drawbacks of living in big cities that living here is becoming increasingly problematic due to transport. Urban pollution is the most important issue these days. Pollution higher compared to small towns or villages. For instance, a large number of people must go to work using their own vehicles or public transport, which causes air pollution and noise. In addition, there is a lot of competition for every job application, which also significantly reduces the chances of getting a job in cities compared to cities. Thus, these are a few things that make growth in the city less difficult. On the other hand, some people believe that life there is more comfortable. There is no doubt that a city offers a greater life from some aspects, such as an advanced educational system, almost well health services, transport facilities and remarkable shopping malls. There are great number of jobs available in the urban areas. If young people move to a town, starting a new career could be far easier. Furthermore, most entertainments are easy to reach. Clubs, restaurants and movie theatres are more prolific in these busy areas, and young people often discover new attractions that will open in the city sooner than elsewhere. Finally, urban living makes people more tolerant, civilized and open-minded. In conclusion, although it is generally accepted that urban life is an unreasonable decision, I think this approach may be suitable for some people with different aspects.
Nowadays,
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to
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big
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cities
, whether in search of a better
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life
or
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job
opportunities. Although
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some
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people
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think
that activity in
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urban
areas is getting harder, others
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think
that
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living
is easy. This essay will
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analyse
the benefits and drawbacks of
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living
in the cities.

There are
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some
drawbacks of
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living
in
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big
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cities
that
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living
here is becoming
increasingly
problematic due to transport.
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Urban
pollution is the most
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important
issue these days. Pollution higher compared to
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small
towns or villages.
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people
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own
vehicles or public transport, which causes air pollution and noise.
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, there is
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a lot of
competition for every
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job
application, which
also
significantly
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reduces
the chances of getting a
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job
in
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cities
compared to
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.
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growth in the city less difficult.

On the other hand
,
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people
believe that
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life
there is more comfortable. There is no doubt that a city offers a greater
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life
from
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some
aspects, such as an advanced educational system, almost well health services, transport facilities and remarkable shopping malls. There are great number of
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jobs
available in the
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urban
areas. If young
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people
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move
to a town, starting a new career could be far easier.
Furthermore
, most entertainments are easy to reach. Clubs, restaurants and movie
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theatres
are more prolific in these busy areas, and young
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people
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often
discover new attractions that will open in the city sooner than elsewhere.
Finally
,
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urban
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living
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makes
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people
more tolerant, civilized and open-minded.

In conclusion
, although it is
generally
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accepted
that
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urban
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life
is an unreasonable decision, I
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think
this approach may be suitable for
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some
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people
with
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different
aspects.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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