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TOPIC: Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe it is getting easier. v. 2

Advanced technology, in today's world, is a boon for the police and criminal investigators, as it aids in the prevention of criminal activities and solving it. However, I believe that crime and criminals are increasing day by day and these technologies helps them to escape the punishments. In this era of technology, various advancement could be seen in the police departments. Gone are the days, when inspectors used to chase robbers on bikes or cars, now it is done through drones and helicopters. X-rays, which once meant to be a forte for radiologists are now being used to screen weapons even without touching the suspects. In addition, CCTV's are there in every nook and corners, from streets to bedrooms, hence, people aware of being watched, will stay away from illegal practices, heinous crimes and even small traffic violations. On the other hand, with the technological advancement, mobile phones and internet became one of the basic needs of mankind, which is a gateway for a new type called cybercrime. For example, pirated copy of movies is watched by millions online long before the official release; therefore, knowingly or unknowingly all these people are involved in wrongdoing. According to a report by Mr. Arvind Vashist, Head of Cyber Police in India, suicides accounts fro 5% death in New Delhi of which two- third are victims of pornography. Furthermore, nowadays thieves are stealing money from the banks with ease, sitting from the comfort of their home. To conclude, although, the advancement in science and technology reduced some crimes such as stealing, robbery etc. , there is a steep rise in cyber criminals and crimes associated with it.

IELTS essay TOPIC: Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe it is getting easier. Discuss both views & give your own opinion. v.2

Advanced
technology
, in
today
's world, is a boon for the police and
criminal
investigators, as it aids in the prevention of
criminal
activities and solving it.
However
, I believe that
crime
and
criminals
are increasing day by day and these
technologies
helps
them to escape the punishments. In this era of
technology
, various advancement could be
seen
in the police departments. Gone
are
the days, when inspectors
used
to chase robbers on bikes or cars,
now
it
is done
through drones and helicopters. X-rays, which once meant to be a forte for radiologists are
now
being
used
to screen weapons even without touching the suspects.
In addition
, CCTV's are there in every nook and corners, from streets to bedrooms,
hence
,
people
aware of being
watched
, will stay away from illegal practices, heinous
crimes
and even
small
traffic violations.
On the other hand
, with the technological advancement, mobile phones and internet became one of the basic needs of mankind, which is a gateway for a new type called cybercrime.
For example
, pirated copy of movies is
watched
by millions online long
before
the official release;
therefore
,
knowingly
or
unknowingly
all these
people
are involved
in wrongdoing. According to a report by Mr. Arvind
Vashist
, Head of Cyber Police in India, suicides accounts
fro
5% death in New Delhi of which two- third are victims of pornography.
Furthermore
, nowadays thieves are stealing money from the banks with
ease
, sitting from the comfort of their home.
To conclude
, although, the advancement in science and
technology
reduced
some
crimes
such as stealing, robbery etc.
,
there is a steep rise in cyber
criminals
and
crimes
associated with it.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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