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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this v.38

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this v. 38
Children are the most fragile, they need a guide to having the right way in life. Teaching children is not always easy, especially how to teach them to become good members of society. Both parents and the school have responsibility for children's development On the one hand, parents have a duty to teach children how to be good members of the community. Since parents are the mirror of their children, they have the most effective with children. Children would do the same things as their parents, that's the reason why parents should become a good example and teach them in the right manner. For example, children may mimic their parents in the way of speaking, treating other people, or even hobbies. On the other hand, the school has the importance to teach children how to be good members of the association. By using most of the time at school, children gain much knowledge on a daily basis. This means that children should be taught all aspects of life. For instance, the school could teach children some social skills such as greetings, politeness, etc. . Since they usually stay at school from the morning to the evening in which they do not stay with parents, but with friends and teachers, social skills would help children a lot of school life. In conclusion, it is obvious that parents and schools must collaborate on the way of teaching children to become good members of society. It's really harmful that one side does not care for children or judge these works belong to another. Parents and schools must balance the burden and help children grow.
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Children
are the most fragile, they need a guide to having the right way in life. Teaching
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children
is not always easy,
especially
how to
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teach
them to become
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good
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members
of society. Both
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parents
and the
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school
have responsibility for children's development

On the one hand,
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parents
have a duty to
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teach
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children
how to be
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good
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members
of the community. Since
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parents
are the mirror of their
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children
, they have the most effective with
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children
.
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Children
would do the same things as their
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parents
, that's the reason why
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parents
should become a
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good
example and
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teach
them in the right manner.
For example
,
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children
may mimic their
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parents
in the way of speaking, treating other
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people
, or even hobbies.

On the other hand
, the
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school
has the importance to
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teach
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children
how to be
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good
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members
of the association. By using most of the time at
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school
,
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children
gain much knowledge on a daily basis. This means that
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children
should
be taught
all aspects of life.
For instance
, the
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school
could
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teach
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children
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some
social
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skills
such as greetings, politeness, etc.
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.
Since they
usually
stay at
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school
from the morning to the evening in which they do not stay with
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parents
,
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but
with friends and teachers, social
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skills
would
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help
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children
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a lot of
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school
life.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that
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parents
and
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schools
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must
collaborate on the way of teaching
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children
to become
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good
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members
of society. It's
really
harmful that one side does not care for
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children
or judge these works belong to another.
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Parents
and
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schools
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
balance the burden and
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help
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children
grow.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this v. 38

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
271 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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