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Some people believe that latest computers and technologies are more convenient that previous ones while others oppose this idea. v.1

Some people believe that latest computers and technologies are more convenient that previous ones while others oppose this idea. v. 1
With the increasing demand on making computers to be more convenient, engineers continuously innovate to create better ones. Despite this, some people find the latest computers harder to use compared with previous ones. Nevertheless, most people find the newest IT products are more convenient though. Some people are not used to the new products offered by IT companies. People who work with Windows XP for years will find Windows 8 uncanny with its new Apps System and the way on how a program is installed. On the other hand, most people, especially young people, quickly adapt to the change of the features. We can see when Mac Book was introduced, most of the young customers did not find it difficult to use, although they used Windows for years. In addition, most of the people understand that new features are meant to make information processing easier. When Skype was released, people rushed to download and learn how to use it; it is the best feature to do cam chats. Unfortunately, the others fail to understand the need of learning features which obviously leads to easier usage. It is because of their lack of curiosity of those, hence, they feel unable to understand the way those are used. Are recent computers harder or easier to use? In conclusion, it depends on each person's ability and interest to learn new features offered by IT companies. However, judging on the large proportion of those who find it easy to use recent computers, those who find it difficult to use can use the computers easily if they have great interest to learn.
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continuously
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who work with Windows XP for years will
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find
Windows 8 uncanny with its
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new
Apps System and the way on how a program
is installed
.
On the other hand
, most
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people
,
especially
young
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people
,
quickly
adapt to the
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change
of the features. We can
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Mac Book
was introduced
, most of the young customers did not
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it difficult to
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use
, although they
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used
Windows for years.

In addition
, most of the
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people
understand that
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new
features
are meant
to
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make
information processing easier. When Skype
was released
,
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people
rushed to download and learn how to
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use
it; it is the best
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feature
to do cam chats. Unfortunately, the others fail to understand the need of learning features which
obviously
leads to easier usage. It is
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because
of their lack of curiosity of those,
hence
, they feel unable to understand the way those are
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used
.

Are recent computers harder or easier to
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use
?
In conclusion
, it depends on each person's ability and interest to learn
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new
features offered by IT
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companies
.
However
, judging on the large proportion of those who
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find
it easy to
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use
recent computers, those who
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it difficult to
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use
can
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use
the computers
easily
if they have great interest to learn.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that latest computers and technologies are more convenient that previous ones while others oppose this idea. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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