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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. Discuss both views. v.8

Few people believed that in animal sanctuary they are treated harshly and consequently it should be close whereas majority of people consider that they are in sake for securing our fauna. In my opinion, individual den of animals clubbed together in a wide area is the only places where they are safe and secure to the upmost. Some portions of people ponder to lock down hub of the creatures. The most compelling reason, they are treated unlawful. This is because lack of proper food and negligence as and when required. As results, we often heard in the news that creatures like dear, white tiger are on the verge of extinction and as well as they are used for different circus shows that are unethical and without consent of the authority. Additionally, proper medical facilities are lacking. Due to absence of specialist veteran doctor, some of the animals died without having proper medication and care. Therefore, various die such as at the time of giving birth, deficient cares of newborns and improper treatment. On the other hand, undoubtly shelter is the best place where a life sustains. Firstly, security is the prime issue for flora, fauna as well as for human being. Every species of nature like to stay in its comfort zone. Hence, shelter for individual is the best place and we can limit the cluster spread for the sake of mankind. For instance, most poisonous snake like cobra, are kept under proper surveillance to protect homosapiens from their attack and widespread. Indeed, children enjoy and learn while observing different kinds of animals in habitat. It helps them in learning at beginning stages of their life which inculcate them to co-relate what they learn in their books. Hence, it is easy for us to take them around to see the shelters of animals, unless it is difficult, if they are not kept in barricades. To conclude, to be in restriction is always being the best way to deal with whether in case of living being or animals. I strongly believe that zoos are essential to keep them in control as well as to stop the spread in towns as it leads to creates unnecessary panic and awkward situation.
Few
people
believed that in
animal
sanctuary they
are treated
harshly
and
consequently
it should be close whereas
majority of
people
consider that they are in sake for securing our fauna. In my opinion, individual den of
animals
clubbed together in a wide area is the
only
places where they are safe and secure to the upmost.

Some
portions of
people
ponder to lock down hub of the creatures. The most compelling reason, they
are treated
unlawful. This is
because
lack of
proper
food and negligence as and when required. As results, we
often
heard in the news that creatures like dear, white tiger are on the verge of extinction and
as well
as they are
used
for
different
circus
shows
that are unethical and without consent of the authority.
Additionally
,
proper
medical facilities are lacking. Due to absence of specialist veteran doctor,
some of the
animals
died
without having
proper
medication and care.
Therefore
, various
die
such as at the time of giving birth, deficient cares of newborns and improper treatment.

On the other hand
,
undoubtly
shelter is the best place where a life sustains.
Firstly
, security is the prime issue for flora, fauna
as well
as for human being. Every species of nature like to stay in its comfort zone.
Hence
, shelter for individual is the best
place and
we can limit the cluster spread for the sake of mankind.
For instance
, most poisonous snake like cobra, are
kept
under
proper
surveillance to protect
homosapiens
from their attack and widespread.
Indeed
, children enjoy and learn while observing
different
kinds of
animals
in habitat. It
helps
them in learning at beginning stages of their life which inculcate them to co-relate what they learn in their books.
Hence
, it is easy for us to take them around to
see
the shelters of
animals
, unless it is difficult, if they are not
kept
in barricades.

To conclude
, to be in restriction is always being the best way to deal with whether in case of living being or
animals
. I
strongly
believe that zoos are essential to
keep
them in control
as well
as to
stop
the spread in towns as it leads to creates unnecessary panic and awkward situation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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