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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. v. 4
It is often argued that wildlife park is good protection centre while others think that it is harsh for them. In my perspective zoos help to safeguard rare animals but they should also allow freedom of movement. This essay will highlight the factors to support both the opinions. Every living creature has the right to live the life according to their wish the same should be for the wild beings. Living in an enclosed area with less space to move and also, behind the bars is cruel as they cannot have a normal life as they had in jungles. The management of these ecological parks does not put an effort to provide for the requirements of each mammal. It has been observed people visiting these places try to poke the animals and disturb their habitats by clicking the picture or throwing stones at them. However, these arrangements help to protect the endangered and extinct species as there is a threat to their life. They are provided with the proper environment and care.
It is
often
argued that wildlife park is
good
protection
centre
while others
think
that it is harsh for them. In my perspective zoos
help
to safeguard rare animals
but
they should
also
allow
freedom of movement. This essay will highlight the factors to support both the opinions.

Every living creature has the right to
live
the life according to their wish the same should be for the wild beings. Living in an enclosed area with less space to
move
and
also
, behind the bars is cruel as they cannot have a normal life as they had in jungles. The management of these ecological parks does not put an effort to provide for the requirements of each mammal. It has
been observed
people
visiting these places try to poke the animals and disturb their habitats by clicking the picture or throwing stones at them.

However
, these arrangements
help
to protect the endangered and extinct species as there is a threat to their life. They
are provided
with the proper environment and care.
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IELTS essay Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals.

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