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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. v. 4

It is often argued that wildlife park is good protection centre while others think that it is harsh for them. In my perspective zoos help to safeguard rare animals but they should also allow freedom of movement. This essay will highlight the factors to support both the opinions. Every living creature has the right to live the life according to their wish the same should be for the wild beings. Living in an enclosed area with less space to move and also, behind the bars is cruel as they cannot have a normal life as they had in jungles. The management of these ecological parks does not put an effort to provide for the requirements of each mammal. It has been observed people visiting these places try to poke the animals and disturb their habitats by clicking the picture or throwing stones at them. However, these arrangements help to protect the endangered and extinct species as there is a threat to their life. They are provided with the proper environment and care.

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often
 argued that wildlife park is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
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centre
 while others This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that it is harsh for them. In my perspective zoos This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to safeguard rare animals This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 they should also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 freedom of movement. This essay will highlight the factors to support both the opinions.

Every living creature has the right to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 the life according to their wish the same should be for the wild beings. Living in an enclosed area with less space to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 and also
, behind the bars is cruel as they cannot have a normal life as they had in jungles. The management of these ecological parks does not put an effort to provide for the requirements of each mammal. It has been observed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 visiting these places try to poke the animals and disturb their habitats by clicking the picture or throwing stones at them.

However
, these arrangements This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to protect the endangered and extinct species as there is a threat to their life. They are provided
 with the proper environment and care. 

IELTS essay Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals.

Essay

American English

3 paragraphs

172 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5

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