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Some people believe that it is valuable for society to experiment with bacteria and viruses while others feel this is dangerous and should not be done Discuss both views and give your own opinion Use examples and explanations from your own knowledge to su v.3

Some people believe that it is valuable for society to experiment with bacteria and viruses while others feel this is dangerous and should not be done 3
In these modern era, government and pharmaceuticals companies are spent millions of dollars on the microbiology research programmes. Scientists cultivate, identify, and experimenting on microbes such as bacteria, viruses and many more in microbiology programme centre. Many persons believe that it should be banned as it is very dangerous for humanity and other species. However, other people and I believe that these such programmes should be conducted continuously. I will discuss both sides and give my opinion in further ensuring paragraphs. There are many reasons behind that experimenting on bacteria and viruses should be banned. Firstly, these type of bacterias and viruses can make extremely ill and cause death. Bacteria and viruses spread more as population higher, also very difficult to manage to spread because people cannot see from their naked eyes. It can spread via air, human touch, breathing, water, food and many more. Furthermore, people conduct such an experiment to make bio-weapons, these weapons leads to the extinction of humanity. For example, some researchers believe that infamous coronavirus is man-made, this virus spreading across the globe rapidly, as death is rate 2% from this virus. On the other hand, conducting research on microbes has many benefits to society. First and foremost, increases the live span of humans. To explain this, in earlier time people were dying from many viruses and bacterial disease like common flu, chickenpox, bronchitis, pneumonia. After the conducting experiment with advanced biology equipment on such microbes’ scientists are able to find vaccines and antibiotics which saves millions of lives every day. For example, recently Thailand microbiologist scientist performed an experiment on virus covid-19 and find out preventive medicine for coronavirus, and saves many lives. In conclusion, performing experiments on microbes has both beneficial and detrimental results. Many experts and I believe that the overall result of such experiments is positive.
In these modern era,
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government
and pharmaceuticals
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companies
are spent
millions of dollars on the microbiology research
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programmes
. Scientists cultivate, identify, and experimenting on
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microbes
such as bacteria,
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viruses
and
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many
more in microbiology
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programme
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centre
.
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Many
persons
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believe
that it should
be banned
as it is
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very
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dangerous
for humanity and other species.
However
, other
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people
and I
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believe
that these such
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programmes
should
be conducted
continuously
. I will discuss both sides and give my opinion in
further
ensuring paragraphs.

There are
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many
reasons behind that experimenting on bacteria and
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viruses
should
be banned
.
Firstly
, these type of
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bacterias
and
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viruses
can
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make
extremely
ill and cause death. Bacteria and
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viruses
spread more
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as
population higher,
also
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very
difficult to manage to spread
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because
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people
cannot
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see
from their naked eyes. It can spread via air, human touch, breathing, water, food and
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many
more.
Furthermore
,
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people
conduct such an
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experiment
to
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make
bio-weapons, these weapons leads to the extinction of humanity.
For example
,
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some
researchers
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believe
that infamous coronavirus is
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man
-made, this virus spreading across the globe
rapidly
, as death is rate 2% from this virus.

On the other hand
, conducting research on
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microbes
has
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many
benefits to society.
First
and foremost, increases the
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live
span of humans. To
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explain
this, in earlier time
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people
were dying from
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many
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viruses
and bacterial disease like common flu, chickenpox, bronchitis, pneumonia. After the conducting
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experiment
with advanced biology equipment on such
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microbes’
scientists are able to find vaccines and antibiotics which saves millions of
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lives
every day.
For example
, recently Thailand microbiologist scientist performed an
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experiment
on virus
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid-19
and find out preventive medicine for coronavirus, and saves
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many
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lives
.

In conclusion
, performing
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experiments
on
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microbes
has both beneficial and detrimental results.
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Many
experts and I
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believe
that the
overall
result of such
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experiments
is
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positive
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is valuable for society to experiment with bacteria and viruses while others feel this is dangerous and should not be done 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
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