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Some people believe that technology has made people’s lives easier while others think the opposite. Which do you believe and why? Give explanations and examples to support your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that technology has made people’s lives easier while others think the opposite. Which do you believe and why? Give explanations and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
Some people are against the belief that technology has facilitated the livelihood of many. This essay is going to support the importance of technology in our daily life by presenting two examples of inventions that have changed our lives and why. The creation of the motor engine is an illustration of a revolutionary technology because it allows us to get from A to B in a shorter period of time than by walking or using animals such as horses. For instance, the food distribution between long distances has improved since this invention helps people to obtain easily and faster what they need. If they cannot find what they are looking for in their local area, they can just drive a car or take a public transport in order to get where they can buy what they want. Another convenient and necessary technology is the internet, as it has allowed instantaneous communication all over the world. For example, before the advent of the internet, people used to communicate by letters which could take months to arrive at their final destination and make the information flow slowly. However, this situation has changed. Nowadays, people can send and receive messages from the other side of the planet through tools such as email and WhatsApp in a matter of seconds by using the internet. To conclude, I totally agree that technology has made people's lives more convenient and easier than they used to be. Because we use these inventions, we save time. As a result, we can do many more activities during our day either for work or leisure.
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technology
in our daily life by presenting two examples of inventions that have
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technology
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from A to B in a shorter period of time than by walking or using animals such as horses.
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helps
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people
to obtain
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drive a car or take
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where they can
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what they want.

Another convenient and necessary
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technology
is the internet, as it has
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instantaneous communication all over the world.
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the information flow
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changed
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people
can
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and receive messages from the other side of the planet through tools such as email and WhatsApp in a matter of seconds by using the internet.

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more convenient and easier than they
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these inventions, we save time.
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more activities during our day either for work or leisure.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that technology has made people’s lives easier while others think the opposite. Which do you believe and why? Give explanations and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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