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Some people believe that it is better for the people to live in cities where the conditions for living are better and far more comfortable. Others, however, feel that living in villages is better. Discuss both these views. v.2

Some people believe that it is better for the people to live in cities where the conditions for living are better and far more comfortable. Others, however, feel that living in villages is better. v. 2
There is a huge difference between living in a city and village. While some individuals think, city lifestyle is superior to reside others, believe residing in villages to be a better choice. Both the views will be discussed in this essay. On the one hand, living in a city comes with the two benefits such as, standardised way of living and comfort. People can change their lives in a positive way by adapting to the services like a standard education and employment, which are available in the city. International schools and multinational companies can be considered as a prime example that will be conducive to improving one's future. Moreover, they can travel anywhere effortlessly by using commute amenities in the city. For instance, metros and flights enhance the mode of travelling by reaching the destinations quicker. Clearly, people are more benefited living in the city by utilizing options that improves their lifestyle and provides comfort. On the other hand, staying in a village allows an individual to relish a calm and pollution-free environment. Villagers can enjoy the peaceful environment because there will not be any traffic like in the city as well as less pollution, since the number of vehicles will also be trivial. As a result, most of them are healthy and do not suffer from any skin diseases due to the clean and calm surroundings. In other words, the villagers have an opportunity to live in a serene environment unlike the busy city lifestyle. In conclusion, the livelihood of city and village is entirely different. People are more comfortable and have a chance to improve their way of life in city. However, the village lifestyle bestows a peaceful environment which is suitable to maintain good health.
There is a huge difference between
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living
in a city and
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village
. While
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some
individuals
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think
, city lifestyle is superior to reside others, believe residing in
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villages
to be a better choice. Both the views will
be discussed
in this essay.

On the one hand,
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living
in a city
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comes
with the two benefits such as,
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standardised
way of
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living
and comfort.
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People
can
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change
their
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lives
in a
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positive
way by adapting to the services like a standard education and employment, which are available in the city. International schools and multinational
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companies
can
be considered
as a prime example that will be conducive to improving one's future.
Moreover
, they can travel anywhere
effortlessly
by using commute amenities in the city.
For instance
, metros and flights enhance the mode of travelling by reaching the destinations quicker.
Clearly
,
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people
are more benefited
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living
in the city by utilizing options that
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improves
their lifestyle and provides comfort.

On the other hand
, staying in a
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village
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allows
an individual to relish a calm and pollution-free
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environment
. Villagers can enjoy the peaceful
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environment
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because
there will not be any traffic like in the city
as well
as less pollution, since the number of vehicles will
also
be trivial.
As a result
, most of them are healthy and do not suffer from any skin diseases due to the clean and calm surroundings.
In other words
, the villagers have an opportunity to
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live
in a serene
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environment
unlike the busy city lifestyle.

In conclusion
, the livelihood of city and
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village
is
entirely
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different
.
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People
are more comfortable and have a chance to
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improve
their way of life in city.
However
, the
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village
lifestyle bestows a peaceful
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environment
which is suitable to maintain
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good
health.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better for the people to live in cities where the conditions for living are better and far more comfortable. Others, however, feel that living in villages is better. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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