People have different views about the financial support to elderly people who have retired. While some people disagree with plan of government support for retirees. In my view, I believe that old people deserve to receive pension.
On the one hand, people should save money from their monthly income for their future living expenses and in urgent situations. As it comes to aging, people gradually become weak physically and susceptible to severe illness such as chronic diseases, diabetes or kidney problems which they need to pay a vast amount of money fro treatments. Furthermore, having their own savings means they will not depend on others or government and also enjoy a comfortable life.
On the other hand, the government has a responsibility to support finance to retirees with the purpose of bringing wellbeing to public. For instance, if people after retire do not obtain the financial assistance, they can risk their lives to rob or commit other associated crimes. Therefore the social safety will be threatened. Moreover, old people had paid taxes throughout their working life, thus, they entitled to receive pension from social welfare system when reaching retirement age. The government could also provide them assistance such as medical services, allowances and nursing home where they spend quality time with people in the same age group.
In conclusion, despite of individuals ought to be responsible for their life as saving amount of money from the working life. However, the government should support elderly residents’s finance because they had paid taxes when they still worked for authority.
People
have
different
views about the financial
support
to elderly
people
who have retired. While
some
people
disagree with plan of
government
support
for retirees. In my view, I believe that
old
people
deserve to receive pension.
On the one hand,
people
should save money from their monthly income for their future living expenses and in urgent situations. As it
comes
to aging,
people
gradually
become weak
physically
and susceptible to severe illness such as chronic diseases, diabetes or kidney problems which they need to pay a vast amount of money
fro
treatments.
Furthermore
, having their
own
savings means they will not depend on others or
government
and
also
enjoy a comfortable life.
On the other hand
, the
government
has a responsibility to
support
finance to retirees with the purpose of bringing
wellbeing
to public.
For instance
, if
people
after retire do not obtain the financial assistance, they can
risk
their
lives
to rob or commit other associated crimes.
Therefore
the social safety will
be threatened
.
Moreover
,
old
people
had paid taxes throughout their working life,
thus
, they entitled to receive pension from social welfare system when reaching retirement age. The
government
could
also
provide them assistance such as medical services, allowances and nursing home where they spend quality time with
people
in the same age group.
In conclusion
,
despite of
individuals ought to be responsible for their life as saving amount of money from the working life.
However
, the
government
should
support
elderly
residents’s
finance
because
they had paid taxes when they
still
worked for authority.
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