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Some people believe that government is responsible. To solve global environment issue v.2

Some people believe that government is responsible. To solve global environment issue v. 2
In this 21st century, apart from any issues, protection of of environment is burning woe and it will you buy one school of thought that it is responsibility of authorities to protect it while others believe that it is responsibility of individual hands, I think that it is the duty of both Government and individual equally to protect the environment and the reason for my intonation are articulated trail paragraph. To commence with, to live a healthy life, it becomes necessary to protect environment, some of the measures should be taken by the masses. Firstly, the domestic waste of different kinds Which are thrown by a person in one dustbin, instead of throwing in single dustbin people should separate organic and non organic waste in different beams as a result, It makes the work easy of the waste management department to recycle it, If a person does not separate it the IT result in littering of garbage. Secondly, the private vehicle which is used by People also one of the superior cause of pollution because most of the people use outdated vehicle which create the pollution it can also found in the survey of the Times of India that, in Delhi outdated. Lorry scooters are are responsible for emission of toxic gas like sulphur carbon dioxide and much more. However, it is also a responsibility also responsibility of government to play dominant role in the protection of environment Full stop the factors like public transport which is in the hand of government to improve it. So people start using public transport to set an example in European Nation the buses and trains are available at every corner of the city at affordable prices, So computer love to use public transport instead of private vehicle apart from that the ministry not only Anchorage and the awesome people to plant a tree, but also funding them as these are the lungs of the Earth Day in helping you to emit which act as an air filter. To conclude, to protect the environment for the Government and citizens come together and give their
In this 21st century, apart from any issues, protection
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of of
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environment
is burning woe and it will you
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buy
one school of
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thought
that it is
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responsibility
of authorities to
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protect
it while others believe that it is
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responsibility
of individual hands, I
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think
that it is the duty of both
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Government
and individual
equally
to
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protect
the
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environment
and the reason for my intonation
are articulated
trail paragraph.

To commence with, to
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live
a healthy life, it becomes necessary to
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protect
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environment
,
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some of the
measures should
be taken
by the masses.
Firstly
, the domestic waste of
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different
kinds Which
are thrown
by a person in one dustbin,
instead
of throwing in single dustbin
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people
should separate organic and
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non organic
waste in
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different
beams
as a result
, It
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makes
the work easy of the waste management department to recycle it, If a person does not separate it the IT result in littering of garbage.
Secondly
, the private vehicle which is
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used
by
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People
also
one of the superior cause of pollution
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because
most of the
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people
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use
outdated vehicle which create the pollution it can
also
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found
in the survey of
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the Times of India
that, in Delhi outdated. Lorry scooters
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are are
responsible for emission of toxic gas like
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sulphur
carbon dioxide and much more.

However
, it is
also
a
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responsibility
also
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responsibility
of
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government
to play dominant role in the protection of
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environment
Full
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stop
the factors like public transport which is in the hand of
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government
to
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improve
it.
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So
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people
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start
using public transport to set an example in European Nation the buses and trains are available at every corner of the city at affordable prices,
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So
computer
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love
to
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use
public transport
instead
of private vehicle apart from that the ministry not
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only
Anchorage and the awesome
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people
to plant a tree,
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but
also
funding them as these are the lungs of the Earth Day in helping you to emit which act as an air filter.

To conclude
, to
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protect
the
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environment
for the
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Government
and citizens
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come
together and give their
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that government is responsible. To solve global environment issue v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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