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Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. v. 3
Some people believe that everyone can do crafts. on the other hand, there are some other people who believe that you must have a special ability to create a craft. In my view, every man and woman or every girl and boy can create a craft in a not specific way. First, having a capability for creating a profession is some people's idea, for instance, the believe that Davinci had a wonderful ability in painting. However, everyone can paint, write a poem or make a sculpture, which just does not get as famous as the others. I think there is not any mind blowing talent behind the famous art pieces, but the most important thing is hardworking and doing exercises. Then, some people have an opinion about making a profession does not belong to a special ability. For example, Some of the dolphins and dogs can do a painting which does not mean that the other ones can not do but some of them are trained to paint. It is the fact which is related to the humans. Everyone can paint, play music or have a good handwriting. If they cannot do it at this time, I think they never got trained about it. All in all, the families can make their children to learn every kind of art they want, but the children must do the practice. Hardworking and doing exercise would allow each person to create a special art piece. However, they do not have any specific talent.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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