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Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. v. 2
It is said that art is something that is inseparable from our lives. While some believe that only talented people can create art, I agree with those who feel that everyone has the ability to do so. On the one hand, some people think that creation of art is only possible for people who possess special skills. They argue that only these people can be successful. For instance, human history only recorded the achievements of those artists who were famous in their field, such as Mozart in the music industry. Furthermore, it is sometimes claimed that not every human can survive in such competitive sector. For example, someone may be interested in acting but they cannot become a successful actor unless they are extremely good at acting. On the other hand, I hold the opinion that creation of art does not require special skills. I think that such talent can be acquired through practice. Playing piano, for example, needs passion and long hours of practice in order to play the music without error. I wholeheartedly believe that all of us can become a professional pianist as long as we are passionate about it. Moreover, I think that everyone has the ability to create art although there is a difference between a good one and a bad one. It is undeniable that some movies are not as popular as some other blockbusters; however, these are still masterpieces regardless of the quality. In conclusion, even though usually talented people are more likely to survive in the industry, everyone can still be a professional artist as long as they put in enough effort. Therefore, on balance, I believe that creation of art is not limited to any particular individual.
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is said
that
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art
is something
that is
inseparable from our
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lives
. While
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some
believe that
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only
talented
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people
can create
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art
, I
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agree
with those who feel that everyone has the ability to do
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so
.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
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think
that creation of
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art
is
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only
possible for
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people
who possess special
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skills
. They argue that
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only
these
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people
can be successful.
For instance
, human history
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only
recorded the achievements of those artists who were
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famous
in their field, such as Mozart in the music industry.
Furthermore
, it is
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sometimes
claimed that not every human can survive in such competitive sector.
For example
, someone may
be interested
in acting
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but
they cannot become a successful actor unless they are
extremely
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good
at acting.

On the other hand
, I hold the opinion that creation of
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art
does not require special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that such talent can
be acquired
through practice. Playing piano,
for example
, needs passion and long hours of practice in order to play the music without error. I
wholeheartedly
believe that all of us can become a professional pianist as long as we are passionate about it.
Moreover
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that everyone has the ability to create
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art
although there is a difference between a
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good
one and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
one. It is undeniable that
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some
movies are not as popular as
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some
other blockbusters;
however
, these are
still
masterpieces regardless of the quality.

In conclusion
,
even though
usually
talented
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people
are more likely to survive in the industry, everyone can
still
be a professional artist as long as they put in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
effort.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe that creation of
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art
is not limited to any particular individual.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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