There is a view that it is now worthless to visit museum to gain knowledge about different culture and history as these days all information related to this are available on the internet. I completely disagree with this thought.
First of all, the depth information regarding culture which can not gain through electronic medium on the internet as they only cover brief view about it. For example, it is easy to adopt basic ideas about different social group’s clothes and structure of house from the pictures availalble on the internet but to feel about the atmosphere in reality, people has to visit the museum because museum is such a place where things from different heritage and ethics are being stored for viewing purpose. Thus, less information from the computer can be misguid or can not fulfill one’s desire for understanding different culture which can only be done in physical visit in the museum.
Another one is that people used to be more motivated by looking, touching and listening about history compare to reading about them online. For instance, learning about how one’s country got the freedom in a war by visting war museum is more effective than reading in the article online. In other words, people feel more inspired and understand the value of their freedom through monuments and equipment being used in the war of freedom. Result of this, energetic youngester sometime do register themself with the defence army after visiting such museum and that develops country’s army strength.
In conclusion, although infromation related various culture and history available on the interenet, it can not fulfill people’s requirement in terms of depth information and motivation. To do so, personal visit to such museum is required.
There is a view that it is
now
worthless to
visit
museum
to gain knowledge about
different
culture
and history as these days all
information
related to this are available on the internet. I completely disagree with this
thought
.
First of all
, the depth
information
regarding
culture
which can not gain through electronic medium on the internet as they
only
cover brief view about it.
For example
, it is easy to adopt basic
ideas
about
different
social group’s clothes and structure of
house
from the pictures
availalble
on the internet
but
to feel about the atmosphere in reality,
people
has
to
visit
the
museum
because
museum
is such a place where things from
different
heritage and ethics are
being stored
for viewing purpose.
Thus
, less
information
from the computer can be
misguid
or can not fulfill one’s desire for understanding
different
culture
which can
only
be done
in physical
visit
in the museum.
Another one is that
people
used
to be more motivated by looking, touching and listening about history compare to reading about them online.
For instance
, learning about how one’s country
got
the freedom in a war by
visting
war
museum
is more effective than reading in the article online.
In other words
,
people
feel more inspired and understand the value of their freedom through monuments and equipment being
used
in the war of freedom. Result of this, energetic
youngester
sometime do register
themself
with the
defence
army after visiting such
museum
and that develops country’s army strength.
In conclusion
, although
infromation
related various
culture
and history available on the
interenet
, it can not fulfill
people’s
requirement in terms of depth
information
and motivation. To do
so
, personal
visit
to such
museum
is required
.
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