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Some people believe that confidence wins bigger games that knowledge alone cannot. Also, that accumulating knowledge makes no sense until one has the confidence to put it to use. Is it true that knowledge will help one win a struggle only if it is put into v.2

Some people believe that confidence wins bigger games that knowledge alone cannot. Also, that accumulating knowledge makes no sense until one has the confidence to put it to use. Is it true that knowledge will help one win a struggle only if it is put into v. 2
Enrolling oneself in college or university is considered to be one of the most crucial decisions of a person’s life. Students from a young age aspire to join professional institutes for better career paths, social exposure and enhancement of skills. In my essay, I would enlist the reasons I believe that impels people to attend these institutions with appropriate examples. First and foremost, in today’s competitive world, career success is closely linked with educational qualification. In the past, formal education was not the key to finding a job, but, good connections with work-experience would settle one’s life with little difficulty. Nowadays, the job market has become more demanding, wherein, work experience is considered secondary to one’s professional skills and degree. Youngsters are aware of this and join universities to gain skills and prepare themselves for their future career. For instance, a civil engineer graduated from IIT would stand a better chance over an experienced but unqualified worker for a career in the said field. Another reason why people decide to go to college is to enjoy new experiences. The latest trend has been for the students to pursue their higher studies in a city or country away from their hometown, in a quest to socialize with different cultures and face the challenge of living outside the comfort zone. Foreign Universities and colleges in upscale cities offer this opportunity which is vastly explored by the current generation. For example, engineers from India prefer to explore further education prospects outside India which provide a chance to train amongst global students. In conclusion, there are many factors that may influence a person’s decision to attend college, but the most important one is the fear of not being successful and missing out on new experiences in life
Enrolling oneself in college or university
is considered
to be one of the most crucial decisions of a person’s life. Students from a young age aspire to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
professional institutes for better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
paths, social exposure and enhancement of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. In my essay, I would enlist the reasons I believe that impels
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to attend these institutions with appropriate examples.

First
and foremost, in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s competitive world,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
success is
closely
linked with educational qualification. In the past, formal education was not the key to finding a job,
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but
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
connections with work-experience would settle one’s life with
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little
difficulty. Nowadays, the job market has become more demanding, wherein, work experience
is considered
secondary to one’s professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and degree. Youngsters are aware of this and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
universities to gain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and prepare themselves for their future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
.
For instance
, a civil engineer graduated from IIT would stand a better chance over an experienced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
unqualified worker for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
in the said field.

Another reason why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
decide to go to college is to enjoy new experiences. The latest trend has been for the students to pursue their higher studies in a city or country away from their hometown, in a quest to socialize with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures and face the challenge of living outside the comfort zone. Foreign Universities and colleges in upscale cities offer this opportunity which is
vastly
explored by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
generation.
For example
, engineers from India prefer to explore
further
education prospects outside India which provide a chance to train amongst global students.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
factors that may influence a person’s decision to attend college,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the most
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important
one is the fear of not being successful and missing out on new experiences in life
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that confidence wins bigger games that knowledge alone cannot. Also, that accumulating knowledge makes no sense until one has the confidence to put it to use. Is it true that knowledge will help one win a struggle only if it is put into v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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