There has always been a considerable debate over the topic whether children should enlist to the school as young as possible or they should spend their time at home playing games until they become seven years old.
The main reason why many people favour the opinion that children should spend their time at home until they are seven is that they think younger ages are really important for the brain development and they are afraid of the misguidance possibility of their children. But, unfortunately, this action increases the tendency of becoming an introvert human being later in life. For instance, the childhood spent without friends could create more computer-based lifestyle when the person gets old.
On the other hand, a generation that spends their childhood in school most likely will gather more information about their peers. Also, children will have a lot of chance to learn about interaction with other children and this will help them to have priceless memories with their friends. Furthermore, they will get a chance to have been taught limitless education materials or experiences by their teachers who are already aware of how to teach even the most problematic children. In addition, they will learn about cultural and historical information by visiting museums and festivals. Moreover, they don't have to spend their life in front of a computer when they get older because of their already improved communication skills.
To summarise all my points that I explained so far, I believe that the benefits of sending children to school as soon as possible undoubtedly overweight the disadvantages which are nearly disregardable.
There has always been a considerable debate over the topic whether
children
should enlist to the school as young as
possible or
they should
spend
their time at home playing games until they become seven years
old
.
The main reason why
many
people
favour
the opinion that
children
should
spend
their time at home until they are seven is that they
think
younger ages are
really
important
for the brain
development and
they are afraid of the misguidance possibility of their
children
.
But
, unfortunately, this action increases the tendency of becoming an introvert human being later in life.
For instance
, the childhood spent without friends could create more computer-based lifestyle when the person
gets
old
.
On the other hand
, a generation that
spends
their childhood in school most likely will gather more information about their peers.
Also
,
children
will have
a lot of
chance to learn about interaction with other
children
and this will
help
them to have priceless memories with their friends.
Furthermore
, they will
get
a chance to have
been taught
limitless education materials or experiences by their teachers who are already aware of how to teach even the most problematic
children
.
In addition
, they will learn about cultural and historical information by visiting museums and festivals.
Moreover
, they don't
have to
spend
their life in front of a computer when they
get
older
because
of their already
improved
communication
skills
.
To
summarise
all my points that I
explained
so
far, I believe that the benefits of sending
children
to school as
soon
as possible
undoubtedly
overweight the disadvantages which are
nearly
disregardable
.
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